List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with examples. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (‘prevent from impulsive buying’, ‘limit the kind of budget where I am in’, double “so”). Use linking words (for example, because, so) correctly.

例: Yes — I always make a shopping list because it helps me stick to my budget and avoid impulse purchases. For example, last week I listed only essentials, which stopped me from buying snacks I didn’t need and saved me money.

提案: Good structure and relevant example. Improve by polishing grammar (use ‘a to-do list’, avoid ‘so that’ repetition) and vary linking words (e.g., therefore, which helps). Add a short result statement to show effectiveness.

例: Yes, I make a to-do list every morning to keep me on schedule and finish tasks on time. For example, I list meetings, lesson plans and trading tasks, which helps me stay productive and reduces stress.

提案: Answer is relevant but has grammar errors and unclear phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise reasons with brief explanations. Avoid fragments like ‘they it’ and awkward phrases such as ‘within themselves for remembering’. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ to connect ideas.

例: Some people don’t like lists because they think making them takes too much time and slows them down. Also, many feel confident relying on memory, believing they can remember tasks without writing them down.

提案: Clear preference and reasons. Improve naturalness and accuracy: say ‘a digital app’ or name one, correct word order (‘it’s more convenient and time-saving’), and avoid awkward phrases like ‘ranks on the exact time’. Use one cohesive example and a brief result sentence.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it’s always with me and I can set reminders. For example, I use a to-do app to schedule tasks and set deadlines, which makes planning more convenient and saves time.

× Yes, I make a list when I shop so that I do not spend much out of my budget.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I shop so that I do not spend too much of my budget.

The phrase 'spend much out of my budget' is unnatural. Use 'spend too much of my budget' or 'spend too much money' with correct preposition and quantifier. This fixes wording and preposition usage; keep present simple tense for habitual action.

× It also allows me to prevent from impulsive buying or it allows me to limit the kind of budget where I am in.

✓ It also helps me avoid impulsive buying and allows me to limit the type of budget I am in.

Use 'helps me avoid' not 'allows me to prevent from'; 'prevent from' is incorrect. 'Limit the kind of budget where I am in' is awkward: use 'limit the type of budget I am in' or better 'stick to a budget.' Maintain parallel structure with 'helps... and allows.'

× So I make a list so that I do not forget any items to purchase so so that I regret it when I reach my home.

✓ So I make a list so that I do not forget any items to purchase and regret it when I get home.

Sentence has redundant 'so' and awkward clause order. Use 'and regret it when I get home' with simple present for habitual action. 'Reach my home' is unnatural; 'get home' is more natural.

× Yes, I often make A to do list for my work so that I can stay punctual and complete my tasks within a given time frame.

✓ Yes, I often make a to-do list for my work so that I can stay punctual and complete my tasks within a given time frame.

Use the indefinite article correctly: 'a to-do list' (hyphenated). Capitalizing 'A' is wrong. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× For example, I make a schedule for my meetings, lesson plans, and trading tasks each morning so that I can stay productive and reduce my stress.

✓ For example, I make a schedule for my meetings, lesson plans, and training tasks each morning so that I can stay productive and reduce my stress.

'Trading tasks' likely intended 'training tasks' or 'routine tasks.' If 'training' is intended, correct the word. Structure and tense are fine.

× Some people perceive making list as time consuming.

✓ Some people perceive making a list as time-consuming.

Add article 'a' before 'list' and hyphenate 'time-consuming.' Use gerund phrase 'making a list' as noun.

× They feel they it reduces their productivity and efficiency.

✓ They feel it reduces their productivity and efficiency.

Remove the extra pronoun 'they.' Use 'they feel it reduces...' as correct structure.

× They feel more confident within themselves for remembering every task they have to do with.

✓ They feel more confident in their ability to remember every task they have to do.

'Confident within themselves for remembering' is awkward. Use 'confident in their ability to remember...' Remove trailing preposition 'with.' Adjust noun phrase for clarity.

× I prefer making a list on my phone because it always stays with me.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is always with me.

Both 'prefer making' and 'prefer to make' are possible; 'prefer to make' is slightly more natural here. 'It always stays with me' is acceptable but 'it is always with me' is smoother.

× For example, I use digitalized app to write down the list that I have to do at time.

✓ For example, I use a digital app to write down the list of things I have to do at a time.

Use article 'a' before 'digital app.' 'Digitalized' is odd; 'digital' is better. 'List that I have to do at time' is unclear: 'list of things I have to do' and add 'at a time' if intended.

× It also ranks on the exact time in which I have to complete the given task.

✓ It also reminds me of the exact time by which I have to complete a given task.

'Ranks on the exact time' is incorrect. Use 'reminds me of' or 'shows' and 'by which' for deadline. 'Given task' is fine; adjust article 'a.'

× So it makes more convenient for me and less time consuming.

✓ So it makes things more convenient for me and is less time-consuming.

Add subject 'things' or restructure the clause, and hyphenate 'time-consuming.' Include verb 'is' to complete the sentence.