List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and remove disfluencies (uh), correct small grammar issue (“to when” → “when”), and keep answer within three sentences: give a clear topic sentence, one linked supporting reason, and a brief example. Use a linking phrase like “for example” or “so” to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list when I go to the supermarket because it saves me time and helps me stick to my budget. For example, I list the meals I plan to cook that week so I only buy what I need, which prevents impulse purchases.

提案: Clarify grammar and vocabulary ("make least" → "make lists", "team projects", avoid 'probably' twice), shorten and organize: state directly that you make lists, explain how you use them, and give a concise benefit. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" and avoid unclear phrases such as "work shuttle."

例: Yes, I make lists when I work on team projects and write down specific tasks in order of priority, so I can keep track of my responsibilities. This method usually helps me stay organized and allows flexibility if priorities change.

提案: Avoid vague phrasing and hesitations; give clear, specific reasons. Limit to two reasons with brief explanations, and use linking words like "because" or "for example." Replace subjective labels like "laziness" with softer language such as "they find it time-consuming."

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find the process time-consuming and tedious. For example, busy people may prefer flexible memory-based planning rather than spending time writing and updating lists.

提案: Avoid hesitations and unclear modifiers ("prefer more probably"). Give a direct preference sentence, then briefly explain with a concrete reason and an example. Use connectors like "because" or "when" to link ideas.

例: It depends on the task, but I prefer paper lists for planning important work because writing by hand helps me remember details and focus. For quick errands I use my phone, since it's convenient and I can edit lists easily.

× Yes, I usually make shopping lists to when I go to the supermarket because it helps me to, uh, save time and stick to my budget.

✓ Yes, I usually make shopping lists when I go to the supermarket because they help me save time and stick to my budget.

Two issues: the unnecessary 'to' before 'when' should be removed (sentence structure), and 'it helps me' should match the plural subject 'shopping lists' so use 'they help me'. Also remove unnecessary filler 'to' before 'save'. Suggestion: remove extra words and ensure verb agreement with the subject.

× For example, I write down the items I need for the week so that I don't buy things on an impulse.

✓ For example, I write down the items I need for the week so that I don't buy things on impulse.

The phrase 'on an impulse' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'on impulse' (no article). Keep plural 'items' and verb forms as they are. Suggestion: use standard idiomatic expressions.

× Well, yes, most of the time I make least when I work on a team projects or write down the specific actions I need to complete and prioritize them so I can keep track of my responsibilities and sometimes even probably creating flexibility at my work shuttle.

✓ Well, yes, most of the time I make lists when I work on team projects, or I write down the specific actions I need to complete and prioritize them so I can keep track of my responsibilities, and sometimes this even creates flexibility in my work schedule.

Multiple errors: 'make least' should be 'make lists' (plural). 'a team projects' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'team projects' without 'a'. Sentence structure is faulty: add 'I' before 'write' to keep parallel structure. 'sometimes even probably creating' is ungrammatical; change to 'sometimes this even creates'. 'work shuttle' is wrong word choice; likely 'work schedule'. Suggestions: correct plurality, maintain parallel verbs, and choose appropriate nouns.

× Well, there are a lot of reasons that are coming to my mind, but whatever they make from them is probably, umm, because of laziness and uh, just because it takes a lot of your time and patience to probably keep track of anything you need.

✓ Well, there are a lot of reasons that come to my mind, but probably the main ones are laziness and the fact that it takes a lot of time and patience to keep track of everything you need.

Awkward and ungrammatical phrases: use 'come to my mind' instead of 'are coming to my mind' for this context (present simple). 'whatever they make from them' is unclear; replace with 'probably the main ones'. Remove redundant 'probably' and fillers and use 'the fact that' to introduce explanation. Use 'everything' instead of 'anything' for a clearer object. Suggestions: avoid fillers, choose clear noun phrases, and simplify tense usage.

× Well, it basically depends on what I work on. But yes, I prefer more probably making a list on a paper because it allows me to remember better and concentrate more deeply on what I work.

✓ Well, it basically depends on what I'm working on. But yes, I probably prefer making a list on paper because it helps me remember better and concentrate more deeply on my work.

Preposition and tense issues: 'what I work on' should be 'what I'm working on' for present continuous context. 'making a list on a paper' is incorrect: use 'making a list on paper' (no article). 'prefer more probably' has odd word order; use 'probably prefer'. 'concentrate more deeply on what I work' should be 'concentrate more deeply on my work'. Suggestions: correct prepositions, use natural word order for adverbs, and match tense to context.