List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and stay on topic. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one specific reason and one brief example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., "with our police" is likely incorrect) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I usually make a short shopping list for essential items. For example, I always write down milk and bread so I don’t forget them, but I sometimes buy small extras on impulse when I see special offers.

提案: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain with a specific reason and an example of how unpredictability affects your planning. Reduce hesitations and avoid vague phrases like "a lot of variables." Use linking words such as "because" or "however" to connect ideas.

例: Not usually. Because my work changes day to day, plans often become irrelevant, so I focus on reacting to urgent tasks. However, I still keep a simple task list to capture important deadlines.

提案: Answer generally and then give a clear, specific reason and a short example. Avoid self-reference confusion and repeated words. Use linking phrases like "for example" or "because" to structure the answer and make your point clearer.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel restricted and prefer flexibility. For example, if plans change frequently, following a list can feel pointless, so they choose to decide spontaneously instead.

提案: Start with a direct preference sentence, then provide one clear reason and a brief example. Remove redundant connectors ("Although...but") and unnecessary filler. Use precise adjectives (e.g., "more focused") and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer to write lists on paper because I find it easier to concentrate and avoid phone distractions. For instance, when I plan my weekly errands on paper I remember items better than when I use a notes app.

× I'm not very organized and and disciplined.

✓ I'm not very organized or disciplined.

Using 'and and' is a typographical/repetition error and 'and' is not appropriate when listing two adjectives that describe the same subject; 'or' is more natural here to contrast personal qualities. Remove the duplicate 'and' and use 'or' to sound idiomatic.

× So most of the time I shop with our police and sometime, you know, making impulse purchases are quite fun.

✓ So most of the time I shop with other people and sometimes, you know, making impulse purchases is quite fun.

'Our police' is incorrect and likely a mis-phrase for 'other people'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'Making impulse purchases' is a singular activity treated as a noun phrase and requires singular verb 'is'.

× Umm, not really. My life is quite unpredictable, umm, because there are a lot of variables and a lot of things that can divert.

✓ Umm, not really. My life is quite unpredictable, umm, because there are a lot of variables and a lot of things that can cause distractions.

The verb 'divert' is transitive and requires an object; it's awkward here. Use a noun phrase like 'cause distractions' to match the present-tense discussion and convey the intended meaning clearly.

× So in my case, only being able to react is more important than being able to plan.

✓ So in my case, being able to react is more important than being able to plan.

The phrase 'only being able to react' has an unnecessary 'only' position that creates ambiguity. Placing 'being' without the preceding 'only' reads more naturally; if emphasis is needed, place 'only' before 'in my case' or after 'is'. This is a word order issue within verbal noun phrases.

× I mean, I think I'm the same type of persons as them, so I think I can speak for their cases.

✓ I mean, I think I'm the same type of person as they are, so I think I can speak for their situation.

'Persons' is odd after 'type of' — use singular 'person'. 'Them' after 'as' is colloquial; formally use 'they are' or 'them' with rephrasing. 'Their cases' is unnatural here; 'their situation' fits better.

× The most disturbing things about making this is that you you just kind of follow it because there are a lot of things that can interfere with it.

✓ The most frustrating thing about making a list is that you just end up following it because there are a lot of things that can interfere with it.

'Making this' is vague — specify 'making a list'. 'You you' is a duplication error. 'Disturbing' is odd in this context; 'frustrating' or 'annoying' is clearer. 'You just kind of follow it' is informal; 'end up following it' is clearer and natural.

× Although I don't usually make lists, but when I have to or when I'm motivated to do that, I prefer to make a list on paper because I feel like it's easier to concentrate on the paper while the phone is a little bit distracting.

✓ Although I don't usually make lists, when I have to or when I'm motivated to, I prefer to make a list on paper because I find it easier to concentrate on paper, while the phone is a bit distracting.

Using 'Although' together with 'but' is redundant; remove 'but'. 'Do that' can be shortened to 'do'. 'I feel like it's easier to concentrate on the paper' is wordy — 'I find it easier to concentrate on paper' is more concise. 'A little bit' can be simplified to 'a bit'.