Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and redundancy in your answers. Also, use correct prepositions and plural forms (e.g., 'on Sundays'). Keep your sentences clear and concise, and ensure your answer flows naturally.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, usually on Sundays, Tuesdays, and Thursdays. I spend about three and a half hours there doing my assignments because it helps me concentrate better than at home.

提案: Avoid repeating words and try to be more specific about the tasks you do. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and make your answer more coherent.

例: I usually do tasks that require a lot of attention to detail because the library is very quiet. It typically takes me around three and a half hours to complete these tasks, and I finish the rest at home since the library helps me concentrate better.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your sentences for better understanding.

例: Yes, I did go to the library as a child. It was a mandatory school trip where we had the opportunity to browse historical books. Additionally, we were given a booklet with tips on how to study effectively in the quiet environment of the library.

提案: Avoid unnecessary repetition and try to provide a more structured and clear answer. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and express your opinion clearly.

例: I am not sure because I'm not Chinese, but I have heard that Chinese students study for more than 12 hours a day. Therefore, I believe they often go to the library to study since it is a quiet place that helps them concentrate, especially given their heavy curriculum.

× Yes, I do often go go to the library usually, usually at Sundays and Tuesdays and Thursdays.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library, usually on Sundays, Tuesdays, and Thursdays.

The adverb 'often' should be placed before the main verb 'go' for correct emphasis. The word 'go' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Usually' is better placed before the time expressions. Also, the preposition 'on' is required before days of the week.

× Yes, I do often go go to the library usually, usually at Sundays and Tuesdays and Thursdays.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library, usually on Sundays, Tuesdays, and Thursdays.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to days of the week; the correct preposition is 'on'.

× It helps me better to concentrate than home.

✓ It helps me to concentrate better than at home.

The adverb 'better' should be placed after the verb phrase 'to concentrate' for natural English word order. Also, the preposition 'at' is needed before 'home' to indicate location.

× I usually do tax tax that require a lot of attention and details since the library is a very quiet place and it usually takes me around 3 1/2 hours to do all of this and the rest I take it home because the library just helps me concentrate more.

✓ I usually do tasks that require a lot of attention and detail since the library is a very quiet place, and it usually takes me around 3 1/2 hours to do all of this. The rest I take home because the library just helps me concentrate more.

The word 'tax' is incorrect; the correct plural noun is 'tasks'. Also, 'details' should be singular 'detail' when used in this context. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. The pronoun 'it' before 'home' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× The rest I take it home because the library just helps me concentrate more.

✓ The rest I take home because the library just helps me concentrate more.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here because 'the rest' is the object of 'take'. Including 'it' causes redundancy.

× Yes, I did go.

✓ Yes, I went.

In simple past tense, the auxiliary 'did' is used for emphasis or questions, but in affirmative sentences, the main verb should be in past tense without 'did'.

× They and they and they also presented us with a booklet that gave us tips of how do we study effectively in the library since it was a quiet place.

✓ They also presented us with a booklet that gave us tips on how to study effectively in the library since it was a quiet place.

The repeated phrase 'and they' is redundant and should be removed. The phrase 'tips of how do we study' is incorrect; the correct form is 'tips on how to study'. The sentence structure is improved by these corrections.

× They also presented us with a booklet that gave us tips of how do we study effectively in the library since it was a quiet place.

✓ They also presented us with a booklet that gave us tips on how to study effectively in the library since it was a quiet place.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect after 'tips'; the correct preposition is 'on'.

× I honestly do not know because I'm not Chinese, but I hear that Chinese people study for more than 12 hours.

✓ I honestly do not know because I'm not Chinese, but I have heard that Chinese people study for more than 12 hours.

The phrase 'I hear' is present tense and informal; 'I have heard' is more appropriate for reporting information. This is a minor stylistic improvement.

× So I think personally that they go and study there a lot since it's a very quiet place and they and they can concentrate on their studies since their their their curriculum is very heavy.

✓ So I personally think that they go and study there a lot since it's a very quiet place and they can concentrate on their studies since their curriculum is very heavy.

The adverb 'personally' is better placed before 'think' for natural word order. The repeated words 'and they' and 'their' are redundant and should be removed.