Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Avoid using 'although' and 'but' together, and correct phrases like 'there isn't any distractions' to 'there aren't any distractions.' Also, try to be more concise and natural in your response.

例: No, I don't often go to the library. I prefer studying in my own room because it's quiet and free from distractions. Although the library is peaceful, the presence of many people and their materials sometimes distracts me.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and has grammatical mistakes. Use consistent verb tenses and linking words to improve flow. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points more specifically.

例: I usually borrow books from the library to study at home. Sometimes, I search for information there because buying many books is expensive for me. Therefore, the library is a helpful resource.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Actually, I wasn't interested in going to the library as a child. My mother also discouraged it because she believed children would play there instead of studying, which she thought was inappropriate.

提案: Your answer is inappropriate and contains irrelevant and potentially offensive remarks. Avoid expressing personal biases and focus on providing a neutral, informative response. Also, be specific and use linking words to support your assumptions.

例: I don't have exact statistics, but I think many Chinese children visit libraries because, in such a populous country, not everyone has enough space at home to study. Therefore, libraries provide a quiet place for studying.

× I prefer to study in my own private room because there isn't any distractions in my own room.

✓ I prefer to study in my own private room because there aren't any distractions in my own room.

The subject 'distractions' is plural, so the verb should be 'aren't' instead of 'isn't' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to plural forms (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1).

× Although library is quiet environment and peaceful, but there are lots of people there and sometimes widespread the materials that they read and it disturbs me.

✓ Although the library is a quiet and peaceful environment, there are lots of people there, and sometimes they spread out the materials that they read, which disturbs me.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing definite article 'the' before 'library', incorrect conjunction use ('Although' and 'but' together), missing articles before nouns, incorrect verb form 'widespread' instead of 'spread out', and unclear sentence structure. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 16, 17, 26).

× I borrow books from the library and I studied the books that I borrowed.

✓ I borrow books from the library and I study the books that I borrow.

The sentence mixes present tense 'borrow' with past tense 'studied' and 'borrowed'. Since the context is habitual action, present tense should be used consistently. This corrects the tense inconsistency (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5).

× Or I searched for some information that I needed, but there are lots of books and I don't have sufficient money to buy it.

✓ Or I search for some information that I need, but there are lots of books and I don't have sufficient money to buy them.

The verb 'searched' should be in present tense 'search' to match habitual action. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'books'. This addresses tense and pronoun agreement errors (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 5, 12).

× Then I go to the library and try to borrow something.

✓ Then I go to the library and try to borrow something.

This sentence is correct in present tense and fits the context of habitual action. No correction needed.

× Actually, I'm not interested in going to the library, so when I was a child, I didn't go to the library too.

✓ Actually, I'm not interested in going to the library, so when I was a child, I didn't go to the library either.

The word 'too' is less appropriate in negative sentences; 'either' is the correct choice to express agreement in negative contexts (Grammar Problem Type ID: 16).

× Not only me but also my mother wasn't a fan of studying in the library and she always thought the children played in the library instead of studying and it wasn't a good and proper situation for them.

✓ Not only I but also my mother wasn't a fan of studying in the library, and she always thought the children played in the library instead of studying, which wasn't a good or proper situation for them.

The pronoun 'me' should be 'I' as the subject of the clause. Also, adding commas and conjunctions improves sentence clarity. 'Which' is used to refer to the previous clause properly (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 12, 26).

× I don't have any exact statistics of the Chinese children and I'm not a fan of the Chinese people.

✓ I don't have any exact statistics on the Chinese children, and I'm not a fan of Chinese people.

The correct preposition with 'statistics' is 'on' not 'of'. Also, 'the Chinese people' is better as 'Chinese people' when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 11, 17).

× Because of this, I don't study about them.

✓ Because of this, I don't study them.

The verb 'study' does not require the preposition 'about'. Removing 'about' corrects the sentence (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11).

× But I assume that because China is a populated country and people don't have enough storage or room to study, they go to the library to study.

✓ But I assume that because China is a populated country and people don't have enough space or room to study, they go to the library to study.

The word 'storage' is incorrect in this context; 'space' is the appropriate term to refer to physical area. This corrects the word choice error (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13)}]}