Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and then providing specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library quite often when I was in college about a year ago because I needed to borrow engineering books to prepare for my exams.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to combine your ideas into a coherent sentence using linking words and avoid redundancy. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I usually go to the library to borrow books and study because the quiet environment there helps me concentrate better for my exams.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I often visited the library as a child to read cartoon books and also books about geography because I enjoyed learning about the Earth.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear and complete response, using linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but in my region in India, most schools encourage children to visit the library and read books regularly. I believe similar traditions exist in China as well.

× Yes, only a little bit.

✓ Yes, only a little.

The phrase 'a little bit' is informal and 'a little' is more appropriate here. Also, 'only a little bit' is awkward in response to frequency; 'only a little' better conveys limited frequency or extent.

× the most commonly I go to library because to acquire some of the engineering subjects related books to prepare for the upcoming examinations.

✓ I most commonly go to the library to acquire some engineering subject-related books to prepare for the upcoming examinations.

The adverb 'most commonly' should precede the verb 'go'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'engineering subjects related books' should be 'engineering subject-related books' for correct adjective order.

× I usually go to library to borrow some of the books present though and also to prepare for the upcoming examination.

✓ I usually go to the library to borrow some of the books available and also to prepare for the upcoming examination.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'books present though' is awkward; 'books available' is clearer.

× Because of the silent environment inside library is better to better place to study.

✓ Because of the silent environment inside the library, it is a better place to study.

The sentence lacks a proper subject and verb structure. Adding 'it is' clarifies the sentence. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× more often I visits library to read some of the cartoon based books while I was studying my school and also there are some of the books which provide us the information about the geography of our earth.

✓ More often, I visited the library to read some cartoon-based books while I was studying at school, and there were also some books that provided us with information about the geography of our earth.

The verb 'visits' should be 'visited' to agree with the past tense context. 'Cartoon based' should be hyphenated as 'cartoon-based'. 'Studying my school' is incorrect; it should be 'studying at school'. 'Provide' should be 'provided' to match past tense. 'There are' should be 'there were' for past tense consistency.

× I likes to read those books that those are the some of the main reasons that I.

✓ I like to read those books; those are some of the main reasons why I do.

The verb 'likes' should be 'like' to agree with the subject 'I'. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; adding 'why I do' completes the thought.

× In my region, most of the schools practice their children's to visit and read some of the books inside library.

✓ In my region, most schools encourage their children to visit and read some books inside the library.

'Practice their children's' is incorrect; 'encourage their children' is appropriate. 'Children's' is possessive and misused here. 'Inside library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I also thinks they also Chinese people also have the tradition to.

✓ I also think that Chinese people have the tradition too.

The verb 'thinks' should be 'think' to agree with the subject 'I'. The sentence is redundant and incomplete; simplifying it improves clarity.