Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ภาษาอังกฤษที่เป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงโครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงความซ้ำซ้อน เช่น การใช้คำว่า 'library' ซ้ำซ้อนและประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์ ควรตอบตรงคำถามและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน เช่น เหตุผลที่ไม่ค่อยไปห้องสมุด

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I usually find the information I need online at home. I prefer studying in my own room where it's quiet and comfortable.

提案: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น 'I usually do my homework and review my lessons because the library is quiet.' ควรหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์และเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน

例: When I go to the library, I usually do my homework and review my lessons because it's a quiet place where I can concentrate well.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น 'Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid because I was shy. I liked reading cartoon books since I could understand the pictures even if I couldn't read the words.' เพิ่มความชัดเจนและความเป็นธรรมชาติของภาษา

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid because I was shy. I enjoyed reading cartoon books since I could understand the pictures even if I couldn't read the words.

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'In my opinion, yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library to find information and spend their free time concentrating on their studies.' ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เหมาะสมหรือผิดความหมาย เช่น 'shiny kids' และ 'concentrate time to food'

例: In my opinion, yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library to find information and spend their free time concentrating on their studies.

× I rarely go to library later than taking a room at home to find the information that I want to know in home.

✓ I rarely go to the library later than taking a room at home to find the information that I want to know at home.

The noun 'library' is a specific place and requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'in home' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at home'.

× When I go to library, I prefer to. Perform my homework and take time to review myself and concentrate to.

✓ When I go to the library, I prefer to perform my homework and take time to review myself and concentrate.

The noun 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, the sentence had an unnecessary period and incorrect use of 'concentrate to'; 'concentrate' is used without 'to'.

× When I was shy I usually go to library to read and to read the cartoon book like a animation book because just see the photo, not read book because I didn't understand it.

✓ When I was shy, I usually went to the library to read cartoon books like animation books because I just looked at the pictures, not read the books because I didn't understand them.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match 'was'. 'Library' needs 'the'. 'Cartoon book' and 'animation book' should be plural. 'Just see the photo' is incorrect; 'just looked at the pictures' is correct. Also, 'read book' should be 'read the books' and 'didn't understand it' should be 'didn't understand them' to agree with plural 'books'.

× From my opinion, I think yes, shiny kids love going to the library to find the information and have the spare time, have their own concentrate time to food.

✓ In my opinion, I think yes, shiny kids love going to the library to find information and have spare time, having their own time to concentrate on food.

The phrase 'From my opinion' is incorrect; it should be 'In my opinion'. 'The information' can be 'information' without 'the' here. 'Have the spare time' should be 'have spare time'. 'Concentrate time to food' is incorrect; it should be 'time to concentrate on food'.