Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but needs more natural phrasing and clearer structure. For example, say "I have been going to the library once a week since I was a child." Also, avoid redundancy and improve grammar by saying "I like to read different types of books, such as history and novels, which motivate me to study and research new things."

例: I have been going to the library once a week since I was a child. I enjoy reading different types of books, such as history and novels, because they motivate me to learn and explore new topics.

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs better grammar and clarity. Instead of "it makes me more interesting," say "it makes me more interested." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, "I usually read history books and novels because they give me new ideas and make me more interested in learning."

例: I usually read history books and novels because they give me new ideas and make me more interested in learning.

提案: Your answer needs grammatical correction and more natural expression. For example, say "When I was a kid, I was not interested in going to the library because I preferred playing outdoor games. I found the library boring at that time."

例: When I was a kid, I was not interested in going to the library because I preferred playing outdoor games. I found the library boring at that time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contradictory. First, clarify your opinion clearly. For example, "I think Chinese kids often go to the library because China is an advanced country with many modern technologies, and they can study using different multimedia resources." Also, correct grammar and avoid redundancy.

例: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because China is an advanced country with many modern technologies. They can study using various multimedia resources available there.

× Actually, I go library once a week since I was a child.

✓ Actually, I go to the library once a week since I was a child.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'library', the article 'the' is required. Also, the preposition 'to' is needed before 'library' to indicate direction or destination.

× I like to read many types of books like the historical and many of the novels, which motivates me to study more and to research more about new things.

✓ I like to read many types of books like historical books and many novels, which motivate me to study more and research more about new things.

The phrase 'the historical' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'historical books'. Also, 'many of the novels' is awkward; 'many novels' is better. The verb 'motivates' should be 'motivate' to agree with the plural subject 'books and novels'. The phrase 'to research more' is better without 'to' after 'and' for parallelism.

× I usually read the historical books and novels, which gives me new ideas about many new things and it makes me more interesting.

✓ I usually read historical books and novels, which give me new ideas about many new things and make me more interested.

The verb 'gives' should be 'give' to agree with the plural subject 'books and novels'. The phrase 'makes me more interesting' is incorrect; it should be 'make me more interested' because the speaker is describing their feeling, not that they become interesting to others.

× When I I was kid, I was not interested to go in library because I was interested to play the outdoor games.

✓ When I was a kid, I was not interested in going to the library because I was interested in playing outdoor games.

The sentence has repetition 'I I' which is a typo. 'Was kid' should be 'was a kid' with the article 'a'. The phrase 'interested to go in library' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in going to the library'. Similarly, 'interested to play the outdoor games' should be 'interested in playing outdoor games'. The preposition 'in' is used with 'interested', and gerunds (-ing form) are used after prepositions.

× The Chinese kids go often to the library because China is one of the advanced country over all the world.

✓ Chinese kids do not often go to the library because China is one of the most advanced countries in the world.

The phrase 'go often' is awkward; 'do not often go' fits the intended meaning. 'One of the advanced country' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the most advanced countries' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. 'Over all the world' should be 'in the world' as the correct preposition.

× They have the many types of modern technologies which they can study from the different multimedia.

✓ They have many types of modern technologies which they can study from different multimedia sources.

The phrase 'the many types' is incorrect; 'many types' is correct without 'the'. 'The different multimedia' is vague; 'different multimedia sources' is clearer. Also, 'study from' is acceptable but 'learn from' might be better; however, the correction focuses on quantifiers and article use.