Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "To be honest" and "therefore" together. Also, try to use linking words like "so" to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say "I seldom read books, so I only go to the library occasionally, mainly to borrow Japanese books because I'm studying Japanese."

例: I seldom read books, so I only go to the library occasionally, mainly to borrow Japanese books because I'm studying Japanese now.

提案: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make it more concise and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect your ideas logically. Also, correct grammar errors such as "which book are suitable" should be "which books are suitable."

例: I usually read books in the library, especially Japanese ones, because I need time to decide which books suit me best.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and clear with good supporting details. To improve further, you could use a wider range of vocabulary and vary sentence structures slightly to sound more natural.

例: I often went to the library as a child because school finished early, giving me plenty of free time. I particularly enjoyed storybooks and comics, which greatly enhanced my imagination and language abilities.

提案: Your answer has good content but some grammar and coherence issues. Avoid starting with "Yet" here. Also, use plural "children" instead of "child" and improve sentence flow by adding linking words like "and" or "which" properly. Try to be more concise and clear.

例: Chinese children often go to the library because it offers a quiet place to focus on homework. Moreover, many libraries have famous Chinese literature, such as Journey to the West and Dream of the Red Chamber, which encourages children to read more.

× Maybe I just go to the library when I want to borrow some Japanese book, as I'm also studying Japanese now.

✓ Maybe I just go to the library when I want to borrow some Japanese books, as I'm also studying Japanese now.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' because 'some' is used to indicate more than one item. In English, 'some' is followed by plural countable nouns or uncountable nouns. Here, 'books' is countable and plural, so it should be pluralized.

× I usually read books in the library and especially those Japanese books as I don't know which book are suitable to me, so that I need some time to read them so that I can decide which book I should follow.

✓ I usually read books in the library, especially those Japanese books, as I don't know which book is suitable for me, so I need some time to read them to decide which book I should follow.

The verb 'are' does not agree with the singular subject 'book'. It should be 'is' to match the singular noun. Also, the preposition 'to' after 'suitable' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for'. Additionally, the sentence is long and can be improved by adding commas and simplifying phrases for clarity.

× Additionally, many libraries have famous Chinese literature such as Journey to the West and Dream of the Red Mansion, which encourages child to read more this combination of resources and atmosphere.

✓ Additionally, many libraries have famous Chinese literature such as Journey to the West and Dream of the Red Mansion, which encourages children to read more because of this combination of resources and atmosphere.

The word 'child' should be plural 'children' to agree with the plural subject 'libraries' and the context of 'kids'. Also, the sentence is missing a conjunction or preposition to connect the ideas properly; adding 'because of' clarifies the reason. This improves sentence structure and meaning.