Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is off-topic because you mentioned going to the museum instead of the library. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and contains grammatical errors. To improve, directly answer the question about the library, use correct grammar, and keep your response concise and relevant.

例: Yes, I often go to the library about two or three times a week to read and study.

提案: Your answer provides some details but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use linking words, and avoid confusing phrases. Also, keep sentences concise and relevant.

例: I usually read books that interest me, such as those about cosmology, science, psychology, and philosophy, because I find these topics very intriguing.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Improve by using correct verb tenses, singular/plural forms, and clearer sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because there was only one library in my city, and it was far from my home. Therefore, my father would bring me books that I wanted to read.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, directly express your opinion with clear and correct sentences. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I'm not sure because I don't live in China, but I think Chinese kids often go to the library since their educational system is very well organized.

× It is usually two or three times in a week.

✓ It is usually two or three times a week.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to express frequency within a time period is 'a' as in 'a week'. Saying 'in a week' implies something happening inside the week, but frequency expressions use 'a week'.

× I usually read a lot of books for my interest.

✓ I usually read a lot of books for my interest.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I don't finish all the books there, but I read the books about cosmology, science and sometimes psychological or philosophical books to answer or to thirst my poems.

✓ I don't finish all the books there, but I read books about cosmology, science, and sometimes psychological or philosophical books to satisfy my curiosity about poems.

The phrase 'to answer or to thirst my poems' is incorrect and unclear. 'Thirst' is not used as a verb in this context. A clearer expression is 'to satisfy my curiosity about poems.' Also, 'the books about' should be 'books about' without 'the' because it refers to books in general.

× It's very much intriguing the.

✓ It's very intriguing.

The phrase 'very much intriguing the' is incorrect. The correct form is 'very intriguing.' The word 'the' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× No, I did not go to library when I was a kid because back then there are there are only one library in my city and that was far away from my home.

✓ No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because back then there was only one library in my city and it was far away from my home.

The phrase 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific library. Also, 'there are there are only one library' is incorrect; it should be 'there was only one library' to match singular subject and past tense.

× So my father bring me or bought me books that I need to read or I wish to read.

✓ So my father brought me or bought me books that I needed to read or wished to read.

The verb 'bring' should be in past tense 'brought' to match the past context. Also, 'need' and 'wish' should be in past tense 'needed' and 'wished' to maintain tense consistency.

× When I'm not sure about that because I do not belong to this country as far from my knowledge and they have a very functional educational system.

✓ I'm not sure about that because I do not belong to this country as far as I know, and they have a very functional educational system.

The phrase 'When I'm not sure about that' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm not sure about that.' Also, 'as far from my knowledge' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'as far as I know.'

× So I think they go, the kids go to library, go to the library.

✓ So I think the kids go to the library.

The sentence is repetitive and awkward. Removing redundancy and correcting the article before 'library' improves clarity and correctness.