Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and clarify your activities more precisely. For example, instead of 'write some books', you could say 'work on my writing assignments'. Also, try to combine your ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: Yes, I often go to the library twice a week because it is close to my house. I usually study there and work on my writing assignments.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct sentence structure. For example, say 'I usually do research for my school presentations, and during exam weeks, I go there to study because it is quieter.'

例: I usually do research for my school presentations, and during exam weeks, I go to the library to study because it is quieter there.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use correct verb forms and add linking words for coherence. For example, 'Yes, we had school activities where we went to the library for two hours to read picture books or articles.'

例: Yes, we had school activities where we went to the library for two hours to read picture books or articles.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Avoid incorrect words like 'lie' and improve sentence structure. For example, 'I think Chinese kids often go to the library because their parents want to teach them and provide a quiet place to help them concentrate.'

例: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because their parents want to teach them and provide a quiet place to help them concentrate and stay focused.

× Yes, I go to the library twice a week just to study and write some books.

✓ Yes, I go to the library twice a week just to study and write some book reports.

The phrase 'write some books' is incorrect because writing a book is a long process and unlikely to be done frequently. The intended meaning is probably writing about books, such as book reports or essays. Using 'write some book reports' is more appropriate and grammatically correct.

× Uh, because it's quite near my house so I often go there.

✓ Uh, because it's quite near my house, I often go there.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant when 'because' is already used to indicate reason. Also, a comma is needed after the dependent clause 'because it's quite near my house' to separate it from the main clause. Removing 'so' and adding a comma improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× I usually do some research on my presentation for school and when and exam week I go there for study because I need more quiet.

✓ I usually do some research for my presentation at school, and during exam week I go there to study because I need more quiet.

The preposition 'on' is less appropriate than 'for' when referring to research related to a presentation. 'When and exam week' is incorrect; it should be 'during exam week' to indicate the time period. Also, 'go there for study' should be 'go there to study' to use the correct infinitive form. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes, we had a school activities like went to the library for two hours and just read some picture books or articles.

✓ Yes, we had school activities like going to the library for two hours and just reading some picture books or articles.

The phrase 'a school activities' is incorrect because 'activities' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'like went' is incorrect; the gerund form 'going' should be used after 'like'. Similarly, 'just read' should be 'just reading' to maintain parallel structure. These changes correct number agreement and verb form usage.

× I think yes, Chinese kids lie too often, go to library because parents need teach them and put them in a quiet place.

✓ I think yes, Chinese kids go to the library quite often because parents need to teach them and put them in a quiet place.

The word 'lie' is incorrect here and should be removed. 'Go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Also, 'need teach' should be 'need to teach' to use the correct infinitive form. These corrections fix preposition and article usage as well as verb form errors.

× They help them concentrate and stay focused.

✓ They help them to concentrate and stay focused.

Adding 'to' before 'concentrate' clarifies the infinitive form and improves grammatical correctness. While 'help' can be followed by either the bare infinitive or 'to' + infinitive, including 'to' here makes the sentence clearer and more formal.