Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте повторений и грамматических ошибок, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину, используя простые и правильные выражения.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I usually find all the information I need on my laptop. Also, I'm not really a bookworm, so I prefer using electronic devices like my phone or laptop for studying.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и избегайте излишних повторов. Также старайтесь давать более конкретные детали.

例: Although I don't visit the library often, when I do, I usually borrow books to find useful information for my university articles. Additionally, I like to stay calm and refresh my mind there because it helps me concentrate better.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Следует использовать прошедшее время правильно и строить предложения логично. Добавьте связующие слова для улучшения связности.

例: When I was a kid, I didn't visit the library often because reading books was difficult for me, and my mom had to encourage me. However, as I grew up, I realized that the library is a great place full of useful information, so now I try to visit it more often.

提案: Ответ должен быть более уверенным и структурированным. Избегайте разговорных слов и повторов. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и уточните информацию более конкретно.

例: I'm not sure because I'm not Chinese, but some of my friends from China told me that it is common for Chinese kids to visit the library regularly to find information in books for their studies.

× No, I don't often go to the library because I can use my laptop to find all the information I needed for and actually I'm not a like bookworm.

✓ No, I don't often go to the library because I can use my laptop to find all the information I need, and actually I'm not a bookworm.

The modal verb 'can' is used correctly, but the verb 'needed' should be in the present tense 'need' to match the present context. Also, 'a like bookworm' is incorrect; it should be 'a bookworm' without 'like'.

× Therefore as I mentioned before, like some telephone or laptop are the best tools for me.

✓ Therefore, as I mentioned before, devices like a telephone or laptop are the best tools for me.

The sentence lacks a clear subject; 'some telephone or laptop' is incorrect because 'telephone' is singular and 'some' implies plural. Also, 'like' is used incorrectly; it should be 'devices like a telephone or laptop'.

× I do not have a lot of experience visiting library, but if I will go to this place, I usually take some books and read it to find some useful information for my university articles and that's it.

✓ I do not have a lot of experience visiting libraries, but if I go to this place, I usually take some books and read them to find useful information for my university articles, and that's it.

The noun 'library' should be plural 'libraries' to indicate general experience. 'If I will go' is incorrect; 'if I go' is correct for future conditional. 'Read it' is incorrect because 'books' is plural; it should be 'read them'.

× if I will go to this place, I usually take some books and read it to find some useful information for my university articles and that's it.

✓ if I go to this place, I usually take some books and read them to find useful information for my university articles, and that's it.

'If' clauses for future events use present tense, not 'will'. So 'if I will go' should be 'if I go'.

× I usually take some books and read it to find some useful information for my university articles and that's it.

✓ I usually take some books and read them to find useful information for my university articles, and that's it.

'Books' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should be 'them' not 'it'.

× I prefer to just stay calm and refresh my head in the library because it's really helpful.

✓ I prefer to just stay calm and refresh my mind in the library because it's really helpful.

'Refresh my head' is not idiomatic English; the correct phrase is 'refresh my mind'.

× Well, when I was a kid, I don't visit the library.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I didn't visit the library.

The past tense context requires 'did not' instead of 'do not'. 'Don't visit' is present tense and incorrect here.

× For me it was really difficult task even to read some books.

✓ For me, it was a really difficult task even to read some books.

The phrase 'really difficult task' needs an article 'a' before 'really difficult task'.

× I wasn't like it at all.

✓ I didn't like it at all.

'Wasn't like it' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'didn't like it'.

× But when I grew up and it's like the best place in the world because it's including a lot of useful information.

✓ But when I grew up, it became like the best place in the world because it includes a lot of useful information.

'It's including' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it includes'. Also, 'and it's like' should be 'it became like' to indicate change over time.

× Therefore right now I try to visit it more.

✓ Therefore, right now I try to visit it more often.

Adding 'often' clarifies frequency. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× It's a bit difficult for me to answer for this question because I'm not a Chinese.

✓ It's a bit difficult for me to answer this question because I'm not Chinese.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'answer'. Also, 'a Chinese' is incorrect; 'Chinese' is used without an article when referring to nationality.

× However, I have some friends who came to the US from China and they said that it's like really usual practice for them to visit library because they like just to find some information from their books.

✓ However, I have some friends who came to the US from China, and they said that it's a really common practice for them to visit the library because they like to find information from their books.

'Like really usual practice' is awkward; 'a really common practice' is better. Also, 'visit library' needs 'the' before 'library'. 'Like just to find' is incorrect; 'like to find' is correct.