Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and has some redundancy. Try to be more concise and clear. Start with a direct answer, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'go to library nearby my society'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading novels and books that help me improve my reading skills and general knowledge about my local area.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating the same points. Also, clarify your meaning, for example, what you mean by 'skillful manner'.

例: Usually, I spend my time reading novels and encyclopedias because I am interested in gaining general knowledge and enjoy reading different genres.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'root them in a tranquility place'. Try to use simple, clear sentences and correct grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain reasons.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because I preferred reading there in a quiet and peaceful environment, even though I had many books at home.

提案: Avoid making assumptions or generalisations about people. If you don't know, say so politely. Also, try to answer directly and clearly without unnecessary comparisons.

例: I am not sure about that, but I think many children in China do visit libraries to study and read.

× Yes, because nowadays I am more leaning towards reading than writing or anything.

✓ Yes, because nowadays I am leaning more towards reading than writing or anything.

The phrase 'more leaning' is incorrect; the correct form is 'leaning more' as the adverb 'more' should come before the verb '-ing' form to indicate degree.

× So whenever I have a time I will go to my near go to library nearby my society and I go there read some books and novels because I want to improve my reading skill as well as my general knowledge regarding the place I have been living.

✓ So whenever I have time, I will go to the library near my society and I go there to read some books and novels because I want to improve my reading skills as well as my general knowledge regarding the place I have been living.

The phrase 'a time' is incorrect; 'time' is uncountable here and does not need an article. Also, 'my near go to library nearby my society' is awkward; it should be 'the library near my society'. 'Reading skill' should be plural 'reading skills' as it refers to general ability. Added 'to' before 'read' to indicate purpose.

× Usually I try to spend my time by reading novels and encyclopedias because I have much more interest in reading in general knowledge and encyclopedias than any other other genre of books because I like to do in a very skillful manner.

✓ Usually I try to spend my time reading novels and encyclopedias because I have much more interest in general knowledge and encyclopedias than any other genre of books because I like to do it in a very skillful manner.

The phrase 'spend my time by reading' is incorrect; the correct form is 'spend my time reading'. Also, 'reading in general knowledge' is awkward; it should be 'interest in general knowledge'. Added 'it' after 'like to do' for clarity.

× When I was a kid I was more interested in reading books and many more or more novels.

✓ When I was a kid, I was more interested in reading books and many more novels.

The phrase 'many more or more novels' is redundant and unclear; 'many more novels' is correct. Added a comma after 'kid' for clarity.

× Therefore I always go to library to root them in a tranquility place.

✓ Therefore, I always go to the library to read them in a tranquil place.

The phrase 'to root them' is incorrect; the intended verb is likely 'to read them'. 'Tranquility place' is incorrect; the adjective form 'tranquil place' is correct. Added 'the' before 'library' as it is a specific place.

× I don't have any idea about that, but I still I believe that Chinese people are more intelligent than the western children, so I can assume that they should they often go to library.

✓ I don't have any idea about that, but I still believe that Chinese people are more intelligent than Western children, so I can assume that they often go to the library.

Removed the extra 'I' after 'still'. 'The western children' should be 'Western children' without 'the' as it refers to a general group. Added 'the' before 'library' as it refers to a specific place. Removed redundant 'should' before 'they often go'.