Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar errors such as 'used to go' (which implies past habit) when you mean present habit. Also, specify activities clearly and avoid filler words like 'like'.

例: Yes, I often go to the Edmonton Public Library in my free time. I usually read books there, but sometimes I also play games on their free game consoles. The library offers a great variety of books and entertainment options, which makes it a nice place to relax.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be specific about what you read and what exam preparation you do. Try to keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Usually, I read my favourite books at the library, such as love stories and comics. Additionally, I often prepare for my exams there because the quiet environment helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid repeating 'like' and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Clarify your ideas and use correct verb tenses. Also, explain briefly what you studied to add more detail.

例: Yes, when I was a child, I often went to the public library with my grandfather, who owned it. He encouraged me to study religious texts such as the Vedas, so our visits were mostly focused on learning about religion.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to organize your ideas. Avoid filler words like 'like' and improve sentence structure. Also, provide a clear opinion or observation based on your experience.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese children in general, as I haven't studied with many of them. However, at MacEwan University here, I have noticed that many Chinese students frequently use the library for studying.

× Yes, in my free time I used to go to library, sometimes to play games, sometimes to have some books to read.

✓ Yes, in my free time I used to go to the library, sometimes to play games, sometimes to have some books to read.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× And in the Edmonton Public Library we have a lot of books and even there, like free game consoles, we can play on it.

✓ And in the Edmonton Public Library we have a lot of books and even there, like free game consoles, we can play on them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'game consoles' is plural. Therefore, the correct pronoun should be 'them' to agree in number with the plural noun.

× During my visit to the library, I usually read the books I I like the most, like the love stories, like some and some of the comics I read, and sometimes I do like to do preparation for my exams there.

✓ During my visit to the library, I usually read the books I like the most, such as love stories and some comics, and sometimes I like to prepare for my exams there.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I'), awkward phrasing ('like some and some of the comics'), and redundant expressions ('do like to do preparation'). The correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness by removing repetition, simplifying phrases, and using appropriate expressions.

× Like he used to own a library, like a Public Library.

✓ He used to own a library, like a public library.

The phrase 'like a Public Library' incorrectly capitalizes 'Public Library' and uses 'like' redundantly. Also, 'own a library' is unusual; likely the intended meaning is that he was associated with or managed a public library. The correction adjusts capitalization and phrasing for clarity.

× So he always gave me study about the Vedas and the religion, religious things.

✓ So he always taught me about the Vedas and religion, religious things.

The phrase 'gave me study about' is incorrect. The verb 'gave' does not collocate with 'study' in this way. The correct verb is 'taught' and the preposition 'about' is used to indicate the subject matter.

× And in my country the a lot of people and like I'm studying here in Mccaven University, I've seen a lot of Chinese people going to the library.

✓ And in my country, a lot of people, and since I'm studying here at McCaven University, I've seen a lot of Chinese people going to the library.

The phrase 'the a lot of people' is incorrect; 'a lot of people' does not require 'the'. Also, 'in Mccaven University' should be 'at McCaven University' to correctly indicate location. The correction fixes article misuse and preposition choice.