Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I often go" and "I most of the weekend days I go". Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "Yes, I often go to the library because its peaceful environment helps me concentrate better. Therefore, I usually spend most of my weekends there."

例: Yes, I often go to the library because its peaceful environment helps me concentrate better. Therefore, I usually spend most of my weekends there.

提案: Your answer contains useful information but is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid vague phrases like "so many multiple study types things." For example, you could say: "In the library, I usually work on my projects and homework. Additionally, I participate in language club activities held there, which help me improve my skills."

例: In the library, I usually work on my projects and homework. Additionally, I participate in language club activities held there, which help me improve my skills.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and natural. Avoid filler phrases like "if I say that will be" and "you know?" Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas. For example: "I didn't go to the library often as a kid because it was far from my house. However, I always wanted to visit it."

例: I didn't go to the library often as a kid because it was far from my house. However, I always wanted to visit it.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and could be more precise. Try to use specific vocabulary and linking words to make your answer clearer. For example: "Yes, I believe Chinese children often go to the library because they are very diligent with their studies. They frequently work on projects and assignments, so the library is a useful place for them to focus."

例: Yes, I believe Chinese children often go to the library because they are very diligent with their studies. They frequently work on projects and assignments, so the library is a useful place for them to focus.

× I often go to the library because the environment of the library makes my mind more peaceful and I can study properly in there.

✓ I often go to the library because the environment of the library makes my mind more peaceful and I can study properly there.

The preposition 'in' before 'there' is unnecessary and incorrect. 'There' already indicates a place, so adding 'in' is redundant and grammatically incorrect. The correct phrase is simply 'study properly there.'

× So I most of the weekend days I go to the library.

✓ So I go to the library on most weekend days.

The phrase 'most of the weekend days' is awkward and incorrect. The correct quantifier phrase is 'most weekend days' and it should be preceded by the preposition 'on' to indicate time. The corrected sentence is 'I go to the library on most weekend days.'

× In the library, I do so many multiple study types things like I love to do my project works and I also do my homework and especially the library environment and the language club parts, I also attend those things.

✓ In the library, I do many different types of study activities like I love to do my projects and I also do my homework. Especially, I attend the library environment and the language club activities.

The phrase 'so many multiple study types things' is incorrect and awkward. 'Many different types of study activities' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'project works' should be 'projects' as 'work' is uncountable here. The sentence is split for clarity and better structure.

× Not that much, but I always wanted to go to the library.

✓ Not that much, but I have always wanted to go to the library.

The phrase 'I always wanted' suggests a completed past action, but the intended meaning is a continuous desire from past to present. The present perfect 'have always wanted' correctly expresses this ongoing desire.

× But for some reasons, the main reason if I say that will be the the distance of my house from the library is very long.

✓ But for some reasons, the main reason, if I say, is that the distance from my house to the library is very long.

The original sentence is awkward and has redundant words ('the the'). The conjunction and sentence structure are improved by adding commas and rephrasing for clarity. Also, 'distance of my house from the library' is better expressed as 'distance from my house to the library.'

× That's why I can't make it, you know?

✓ That's why I can't make it, you know?

No grammatical error detected in this sentence regarding pronouns. The sentence is correct as is.

× Chinese groups are very active in those things.

✓ Chinese groups are very active in those activities.

The word 'things' is vague and informal. 'Activities' is a more appropriate and specific quantifier in this context.

× They're always active in their work or the things they do, the projects, assignments.

✓ They're always active in their work or the things they do, such as projects and assignments.

The sentence is somewhat unclear and lacks proper conjunctions. Adding 'such as' clarifies that 'projects and assignments' are examples of 'things they do.'

× So they study a lot for that those things.

✓ So they study a lot for those things.

The phrase 'that those things' is incorrect and redundant. Only one demonstrative pronoun is needed. The correct phrase is 'those things.'