Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, using correct verb tenses and sentence structures. Limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library to spend my free time. I enjoy reading both old books and new magazines there because the atmosphere is very peaceful and helps me focus.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: Usually, I study and explore different books in the library. Sometimes, I meet new students, which I find enjoyable because it shows that the younger generation is interested in learning.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use past tense correctly and provide specific details about your experience. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, when I was a child, my mother and aunts often went to the library for their courses. I enjoyed following them and spending time in the colorful children's section, which was very fun for me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China focuses heavily on children's learning. There are many educational resources available, which encourages children to visit libraries regularly.

× After my graduation from university, I went I often goes to library for spending my extra time by visiting by studying old books and new magazine during in the library.

✓ After my graduation from university, I often went to the library to spend my extra time by studying old books and new magazines in the library.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes past and present tense ('went' and 'goes') and has awkward phrasing. 'I often goes' is incorrect because 'I' requires 'go' not 'goes' (third person singular issue), but since the action is in the past, 'went' is appropriate. Also, 'new magazine' should be plural 'new magazines' to match the context. The phrase 'by visiting by studying' is redundant and awkward; 'to spend my extra time by studying' is clearer.

× After my graduation from university, I went I often goes to library for spending my extra time by visiting by studying old books and new magazine during in the library.

✓ After my graduation from university, I often went to the library to spend my extra time by studying old books and new magazines in the library.

The phrase 'during in the library' is incorrect. 'During' and 'in' are both prepositions indicating time and place, but they cannot be used together here. The correct preposition is 'in the library' to indicate location.

× After my graduation from university, I went I often goes to library for spending my extra time by visiting by studying old books and new magazine during in the library.

✓ After my graduation from university, I often went to the library to spend my extra time by studying old books and new magazines in the library.

'New magazine' should be plural 'new magazines' because it refers to multiple items, matching 'old books' which is plural.

× After my graduation from university, I went I often goes to library for spending my extra time by visiting by studying old books and new magazine during in the library.

✓ After my graduation from university, I often went to the library to spend my extra time by studying old books and new magazines in the library.

'Library' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× Sometimes I meet, uh, meet new students and I it's very enjoyable for me that I see new generation are very interested to studying books and also there is many source of different fields in library that I love to search suddenly.

✓ Sometimes I meet new students, and it's very enjoyable for me to see that the new generation is very interested in studying books. Also, there are many sources from different fields in the library that I love to explore.

The original sentence has pronoun errors such as 'I it's' which is incorrect; it should be 'it's'. Also, 'new generation are' should be 'the new generation is' because 'generation' is singular. 'Interested to studying' should be 'interested in studying'. 'There is many source' should be 'there are many sources' to agree in number. 'Love to search suddenly' is awkward; 'love to explore' is clearer.

× Sometimes I meet, uh, meet new students and I it's very enjoyable for me that I see new generation are very interested to studying books and also there is many source of different fields in library that I love to search suddenly.

✓ Sometimes I meet new students, and it's very enjoyable for me to see that the new generation is very interested in studying books. Also, there are many sources from different fields in the library that I love to explore.

'There is many source' is incorrect because 'source' is singular and 'many' requires plural. The correct form is 'there are many sources'.

× In my childhood my mother and my aunts was very lovely to go to library for their early courses and it was very funny for me to follow up them in library in the kids parts and it was full of colorful.

✓ In my childhood, my mother and my aunts were very fond of going to the library for their early courses, and it was very fun for me to follow them in the library's kids' section, which was full of colors.

'Was' should be 'were' to agree with the plural subject 'my mother and my aunts'. 'Lovely to go' is awkward; 'fond of going' is better. 'Follow up them' should be 'follow them'. 'Kids parts' should be 'kids' section'. 'Full of colorful' is incorrect; 'full of colors' or 'colorful' as adjective is needed.

× In my childhood my mother and my aunts was very lovely to go to library for their early courses and it was very funny for me to follow up them in library in the kids parts and it was full of colorful.

✓ In my childhood, my mother and my aunts were very fond of going to the library for their early courses, and it was very fun for me to follow them in the library's kids' section, which was full of colors.

'Library' should be preceded by 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'kids parts' should be 'kids' section' with the possessive apostrophe.

× Chinese kids also are very interested to go to library because of the the training system of in China, it's very concentrated on the education of children and the production for children is very, very different in the China.

✓ Chinese kids are also very interested in going to the library because the training system in China is very focused on children's education, and the resources for children are very different in China.

'Interested to go' should be 'interested in going'. 'Because of the the training system of in China' is incorrect; it should be 'because the training system in China'. 'Very concentrated on' is better as 'very focused on'. 'Production for children' is unclear; 'resources for children' is more appropriate. 'In the China' should be 'in China'.

× Chinese kids also are very interested to go to library because of the the training system of in China, it's very concentrated on the education of children and the production for children is very, very different in the China.

✓ Chinese kids are also very interested in going to the library because the training system in China is very focused on children's education, and the resources for children are very different in China.

'Library' should be preceded by 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'in the China' is incorrect; the correct form is 'in China' without the definite article.