Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc, tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "like". Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I prefer studying in a private space at home. Moreover, I can easily find information online, so visiting the library is not necessary for me.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói trước đó. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, có cấu trúc tốt với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually go to the library only when my friends invite me. In those cases, I look for literature books to help with my assignments.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "like" và làm câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I preferred playing sports like badminton and volleyball instead.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời không trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Bạn nên trả lời thẳng thắn, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp và cố gắng đưa ra ý kiến hoặc dự đoán dựa trên hiểu biết của mình.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in my experience, many children enjoy going to the library to read and study.

× Well, honestly I don't often go to the library because of some reasons.

✓ Well, honestly I don't often go to the library for some reasons.

The phrase 'because of' is typically followed by a noun or noun phrase indicating a cause. However, 'some reasons' is vague and usually 'for some reasons' is more natural in this context to express multiple causes. Alternatively, 'because of some reasons' can be replaced with 'for several reasons'.

× The primary one is because I want to have a private space to study and I can like find the information on the Internet so.

✓ The primary one is that I want to have a private space to study, and I can find the information on the Internet.

Using 'is because' is redundant; 'is that' is more appropriate to introduce a reason. Also, 'like' is unnecessary and informal here, and 'so' at the end is incomplete and should be removed. The sentence should be clear and concise.

× Well, as I said before, I don't often go to the library just when my friends invite me to come with her, so I just find some literature books for my assignments.

✓ Well, as I said before, I don't often go to the library, only when my friends invite me to come with them, so I just find some literature books for my assignments.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrect because 'friends' is plural; the correct pronoun is 'them'. Also, 'just when' is better expressed as 'only when' to indicate the condition.

× No, I didn't go to any library when I was young.

✓ No, I didn't go to any libraries when I was young.

The phrase 'any library' is less natural here; plural 'libraries' is more appropriate when referring to an unspecified number of places. This is a singular and plural issue as well.

× No, I didn't go to any library when I was young.

✓ No, I didn't go to any libraries when I was young.

When talking about an unspecified number of places, the plural form 'libraries' is more natural and grammatically correct in this context.

× At that time, I just had a tendency to like do some fun activities such as playing badminton or even playing volleyball, and I didn't often go to the library.

✓ At that time, I just tended to do some fun activities such as playing badminton or even playing volleyball, and I didn't often go to the library.

The phrase 'had a tendency to like do' is awkward and incorrect. 'Tended to do' is the correct expression to indicate habitual action in the past. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here.

× Well, it's a tough question for me because I used to be a Vietnamese kid. I don't know the like. The offensive Chinese kids.

✓ Well, it's a tough question for me because I used to be a Vietnamese kid. I don't know much about Chinese kids.

The phrase 'I don't know the like. The offensive Chinese kids.' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It seems the speaker intended to say they don't know much about Chinese kids. The word 'offensive' is likely a misused word here and should be omitted.