Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, say 'I don't often go to the library, but sometimes I visit when I need to find something.'

例: I don't often go to the library, but sometimes I visit when I need to find something specific.

提案: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, be specific about what you do and why. For example, 'I usually read history books because I am very interested in history, and I often discover new information there.'

例: I usually read history books because I am very interested in history, and I often discover new information there.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and use past tense correctly. Also, avoid filler phrases like 'naturally speaking'. For example, 'I don't clearly remember, but I think I went to the library with my father sometimes when I was a kid.'

例: I don't clearly remember, but I think I went to the library with my father sometimes when I was a kid.

提案: Make your opinion clear and use correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences. For example, 'I am not sure, but I believe many Chinese kids go to the library because it is important for learning.'

例: I am not sure, but I believe many Chinese kids go to the library because it is important for learning.

× To be honest I'm not often time go in the library, but sometime I found something so I go to the library.

✓ To be honest, I don't often go to the library, but sometimes I find something interesting so I go to the library.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm not often time go' which is not proper present tense structure. The correct form is 'I don't often go' to express frequency in present tense. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate occasional occurrence, and 'found' should be 'find' to maintain present tense consistency.

× I read history book because I like history and I am very obsessed with history and I also found new things in library.

✓ I read history books because I like history and I am very obsessed with it, and I also find new things in the library.

The phrase 'history book' should be plural 'history books' to indicate general reading. Also, 'found' should be 'find' to keep present tense consistent. 'In library' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'. The pronoun 'it' is used to refer back to 'history' properly.

× Oh, naturally speaking, I don't remember when I was kid and I go to library, but I think I go with my father sometime.

✓ Oh, naturally speaking, I don't remember when I was a kid and I went to the library, but I think I went with my father sometimes.

The phrase 'was kid' needs the article 'a' to be 'was a kid'. The verbs 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate occasional past events. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Well, I don't know, Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think library is very important for all peoples. And so I think they. Going into the library.

✓ Well, I don't know, Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think the library is very important for all people. So I think they go into the library.

'Library' needs the definite article 'the' before it. 'Peoples' should be 'people' as the plural of person is 'people'. The fragment 'And so I think they. Going into the library.' is incorrect; it should be 'So I think they go into the library' to form a complete sentence with proper verb usage.