Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and clear by avoiding incomplete phrases like 'like twist and education AC'. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading different kinds of books, especially romance novels and educational materials.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has some awkward phrases like 'wear my own world'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and express them more naturally. Also, avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

例: Usually, I go to the library to read a variety of books. I enjoy the quiet atmosphere because it helps me focus and feel peaceful.

提案: There are grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions in your answer. Use correct verb forms and clearer phrases. Also, try to be more concise and direct in your response.

例: No, I did not have the chance to go to the library when I was a child because I lived in a village where libraries were rare.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I believe Chinese kids often visit libraries because they enjoy reading storybooks and joke books there.

× I like reading books especially.

✓ I especially like reading books.

The adverb 'especially' should be placed before the verb 'like' to correctly modify it. In English, adverbs of frequency or emphasis usually come before the main verb except 'to be'. Here, 'especially' emphasizes the liking, so it should precede 'like'.

× I like reading novels of romance and like twist and education AC.

✓ I like reading romance novels with twists and educational content.

The original sentence has unclear conjunctions and word order. 'And like twist and education AC' is not grammatically correct or clear. The correction clarifies the meaning by restructuring the sentence and using appropriate conjunctions and adjectives.

× I go to the library and start reading books like variety of books.

✓ I go to the library and start reading a variety of books.

The phrase 'like variety of books' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a variety of books' to indicate different kinds of books. 'A' is necessary as a quantifier here.

× I go there, stay silently and start reading books and wear my own world.

✓ I go there, stay quietly, start reading books, and enter my own world.

'Stay silently' is incorrect; the adverb 'quietly' is appropriate for describing how one stays. Also, 'wear my own world' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'enter my own world' to express immersion in reading.

× I I find peace in library so I love being there all the time.

✓ I find peace in the library, so I love being there all the time.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error.

× No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I were a kid because I belong from the village and there were no not many libraries and I feel I was deprived from that right of mine.

✓ No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I was a kid because I belonged to a village and there were not many libraries, so I feel I was deprived of that right of mine.

'I were' should be 'I was' for singular first person past tense. 'Belong from' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'belonged to'. 'No not many' is a double negative; it should be 'not many'. 'Deprived from' should be 'deprived of'. These corrections fix tense, prepositions, and double negatives.

× No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I were a kid because I belong from the village and there were no not many libraries and I feel I was deprived from that right of mine.

✓ No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I was a kid because I belonged to a village and there were not many libraries, so I feel I was deprived of that right of mine.

The phrase 'no not many libraries' is a double negative and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'not many libraries' to express scarcity.

× No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I were a kid because I belong from the village and there were no not many libraries and I feel I was deprived from that right of mine.

✓ No, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I was a kid because I belonged to a village and there were not many libraries, so I feel I was deprived of that right of mine.

The preposition 'from' after 'belong' is incorrect; it should be 'belonged to'. Also, 'deprived from' should be 'deprived of' to correctly express deprivation.

× Yes, I think Chinese kids as well often go to the library of course because they also like visiting library.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese kids also often go to the library, of course, because they also like visiting libraries.

The word 'library' should be plural 'libraries' when referring to libraries in general. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding commas for clarity.

× Kids especially likes libraries for story books and they find a lot of jokes books in library.

✓ Kids especially like libraries for story books, and they find a lot of joke books in libraries.

'Kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. 'Jokes books' is incorrect; the correct term is 'joke books'. Also, 'library' should be plural 'libraries' when speaking generally.