Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'go to library is like a great thing to do' you could say 'going to the library is a great way to relax.'

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading. It feels like a form of meditation, helping me relax while I read my favorite books.

提案: Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, you can say 'I usually go to the library to read my favorite books. Additionally, I sometimes chat with others to share and learn new things about books.'

例: I usually go to the library to read my favorite books. Additionally, I enjoy chatting with others there to share our thoughts and learn new things about literature.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons. For example, 'I did not go to the library as a child because there was none in my city. However, my mother created a small library at home for me.'

例: I did not go to the library when I was a child because there was no library in my city. However, my mother made a small library at home for me to enjoy reading.

提案: Avoid vague statements and improve coherence. Use specific reasons and linking words. For example, 'I think many Chinese kids go to the library because cities in China usually have many libraries, and education is highly valued.'

例: I believe many Chinese children often go to the library because cities in China have numerous libraries, and education is very important in their culture.

× It's my hobby to read books and go to library is like a great thing to do.

✓ It's my hobby to read books and going to the library is like a great thing to do.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'library', the definite article 'the' is usually required. Also, 'go to library' should be 'going to the library' to maintain parallel structure with 'to read books'.

× It's also like a meditation for me to go sit there and reading my favorite books make me more relaxed.

✓ It's also like a meditation for me to go sit there and read my favorite books; it makes me more relaxed.

After 'to go sit there and', the verb should be in base form 'read' not 'reading'. Also, the sentence needs to be split or connected properly to avoid run-on; 'reading' as a gerund is incorrect here. The subject-verb agreement is corrected by adding 'it makes'.

× I usually am going there because to read my favorite books or going to chat some people and talking about our favorite books and teach each of us a new thing about.

✓ I usually go there to read my favorite books or to chat with some people, talk about our favorite books, and teach each other new things.

The phrase 'I usually am going' is awkward; 'I usually go' is correct for habitual actions. 'Going to chat' should be 'to chat', and 'talking' should be 'talk' to maintain parallel structure. 'Teach each of us a new thing about' is unclear and corrected to 'teach each other new things'. Prepositions like 'with' are necessary after 'chat'.

× When I was a child and no especially because in the city where I where was living there they're not library and I can't able to go there.

✓ When I was a child, no, especially because in the city where I was living, there was no library and I couldn't go there.

The sentence has multiple tense and structure errors. 'Where I where was living' should be 'where I was living'. 'They're not library' should be 'there was no library' to match past tense. 'I can't able to go' is incorrect; 'I couldn't go' is correct past tense modal verb usage. Commas are added for clarity.

× But I have a slight small library which makes my mom at home.

✓ But I have a small library that my mom made at home.

'Slight small' is awkward; 'small' suffices. 'Which makes my mom at home' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that the mom created or set up the library, so 'that my mom made at home' is correct.

× I think so because Chinese people are very smart and clever and it's a big city and they I think they're able to go to the library.

✓ I think so because Chinese people are very smart and clever, and in big cities, I think they are able to go to the library.

The sentence has pronoun confusion and awkward phrasing. 'They I think they're' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'it's a big city' is incorrect because 'Chinese people' refers to many people, not a city. Corrected to 'in big cities' to make sense.

× They will have so many of them.

✓ There are many libraries available to them.

'They will have so many of them' is vague and awkward. It's better to specify 'There are many libraries available to them' to clarify the meaning and use quantifiers correctly.