Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating the same idea twice. For example, you can say: "Yes, I often go to the library because it is a calm and peaceful place where I can study and find useful books for my essays and assignments."

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a calm and peaceful place where I can study and find useful books for my essays and assignments.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and check subject-verb agreement. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question. For example, you can say: "I usually read new books in the library and ask the librarian about the latest arrivals. I enjoy reading because it makes me happy."

例: I usually read new books in the library and ask the librarian about the latest arrivals. I enjoy reading because it makes me happy.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense correctly and make your sentences clearer. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas. For example, you can say: "Yes, I used to go to the library often when I was a kid. My parents took me there, and I enjoyed reading children's books which were very entertaining."

例: Yes, I used to go to the library often when I was a kid. My parents took me there, and I enjoyed reading children's books which were very entertaining.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating the same idea. For example, you can say: "Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to gain knowledge. They usually get a free library card which allows them to borrow books. It is important for children to visit the library regularly to improve their learning."

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to gain knowledge. They usually get a free library card which allows them to borrow books. It is important for children to visit the library regularly to improve their learning.

× I find library very calm and peaceful place to study as well as have some idea regarding your essays or complete your assignment.

✓ I find the library a very calm and peaceful place to study as well as to get some ideas regarding your essays or complete your assignments.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library' and 'a' before 'very calm and peaceful place'. Also, 'have some idea' should be 'to get some ideas' for clarity and correctness. Articles are important to specify nouns correctly in English.

× So I find library very amusing as well as the books that the library has in my place are entertaining so I often go to the library.

✓ So I find the library very amusing, and the books that the library has in my area are entertaining, so I often go to the library.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'as well as' and lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation. 'As well as' is not suitable here to connect two independent clauses; 'and' is more appropriate. Also, 'in my place' is better expressed as 'in my area' or 'near me'. Proper conjunctions and punctuation improve sentence clarity.

× I regularly get communication with the librarian and also like what are the new books that has been arrived at the library

✓ I regularly communicate with the librarian and also like to know what new books have arrived at the library.

The phrase 'get communication with' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'communicate with'. Also, 'has been arrived' is incorrect; the correct form is 'have arrived' because 'books' is plural. Prepositions and verb forms must be used correctly to convey the intended meaning.

× what are the new books that has been arrived at the library

✓ what are the new books that have arrived at the library

The relative clause refers to 'books' which is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. Subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× And she's very delighted and I'm very delighted to go to the library as well as see all the books that has been placed.

✓ And she's very delighted, and I'm very delighted to go to the library as well as to see all the books that have been placed.

The sentence lacks parallel structure and correct verb agreement. 'Has been placed' should be 'have been placed' to agree with plural 'books'. Also, 'to see' should be included for parallelism. Pronouns and verb forms must be consistent.

× Yes, I used to go library very often whenever I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the library very often whenever I was a kid.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' before 'the library' and the definite article 'the' before 'library'. These are necessary to correctly indicate the place being referred to.

× My parents used to take back then and remembering it, it makes me very pleasant, very happy regarding it.

✓ My parents used to take me back then, and remembering it makes me very happy about it.

The sentence is missing the object 'me' after 'take'. Also, 'pleasant' is incorrectly used; 'happy' is more appropriate. The phrase 'regarding it' should be 'about it'. Prepositions and object pronouns must be used correctly for clarity.

× I used to read some kids book and which was very entertaining as well as amusing.

✓ I used to read some kids' books which were very entertaining as well as amusing.

'Kids book' should be plural possessive 'kids' books' to indicate books for children. Also, 'which was' should be 'which were' to agree with plural 'books'. Pronouns and noun forms must be correct.

× Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to get the knowledge as well as to get the help and to increase their knowledge by reading books.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to gain knowledge as well as to get help and increase their knowledge by reading books.

The phrase 'get the knowledge' is incorrect; 'gain knowledge' or 'get knowledge' without 'the' is correct. Also, 'get the help' should be 'get help' without 'the'. Articles should be used appropriately with uncountable nouns.

× And it is kind of essential for kid to have this kind of knowledge and to go regularly and.

✓ And it is kind of essential for kids to have this kind of knowledge and to go regularly.

'Kid' should be plural 'kids' to refer generally to children. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' The sentence should be complete. Quantifiers and plural forms must be used correctly.