Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: English (Nepal): तपाईँले सोधिएको प्रश्नलाई दोहोर्याउनु हुँदैन। सिधै प्रश्नको जवाफ दिनुहोस् र आफ्नो अनुभव वा विचारहरू थप्नुहोस्।

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books and studying in a quiet environment.

提案: English (Nepal): जवाफमा अनावश्यक दोहोर्याइ र अस्पष्टता कम गर्नुहोस्। सिधा र स्पष्ट वाक्य प्रयोग गरी आफ्नो क्रियाकलापहरू वर्णन गर्नुहोस्।

例: Usually, I read books or study in the library because I find it peaceful and it helps me concentrate better.

提案: English (Nepal): भूतकालमा भएको कुरा बताउँदा सही काल प्रयोग गर्नुहोस् र वाक्यलाई स्पष्ट र सुसंगत बनाउनुहोस्।

例: When I was a kid, I did not often go to the library. Instead, I used to play outside with my friends.

提案: English (Nepal): जवाफ दिनु अघि सोच्नुहोस् र स्पष्ट र सुसंगत जवाफ दिनुहोस्। अनावश्यक शब्द र भ्रमित गर्ने वाक्यहरू हटाउनुहोस्।

例: I think some Chinese kids go to the library, but it depends on their interests and school requirements.

× Well, I especially I usually do reading in the library when I'm getting bored or something.

✓ Well, I usually read in the library when I get bored or something.

The original sentence has redundant words and incorrect verb forms. 'I especially I usually do reading' is awkward and ungrammatical. The verb 'do reading' should be replaced with 'read' to express the activity properly. Also, 'I'm getting bored' should be in simple present tense 'I get bored' to match habitual action.

× I used to go library and especially especially I like reading so that's why I go into library reading.

✓ I used to go to the library, and especially I like reading, so that's why I go to the library to read.

The phrase 'go library' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, 'go into library reading' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library to read' to express purpose. Repetition of 'especially' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× Well, when when I'm kid, not really.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, not really.

The phrase 'when I'm kid' is incorrect because 'I'm' is present tense and 'kid' is singular noun without article. It should be 'when I was a kid' to indicate past time.

× I'm not going library when I was a kid, I'm going with my friends, playing in the ground.

✓ I didn't go to the library when I was a kid; I went out with my friends, playing on the ground.

'Going library' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, the tense should be past ('didn't go', 'went') to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Playing in the ground' should be 'playing on the ground' because 'on' is the correct preposition for surfaces.