Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: I don't often go to the library because I don't usually read many books. However, sometimes my friends recommend books related to my hobbies, so I enjoy visiting the library occasionally to explore those.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases like 'at the same time' and organise your answer logically with linking words. Provide specific examples and keep sentences clear and concise.

例: When I visit the library, I usually read newspapers and sports magazines. Additionally, I enjoy reading articles and books about tradition and heritage because they interest me.

提案: Improve fluency by avoiding repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear, specific details about your experience.

例: I didn't visit the library regularly as a child, but during school, my friends and I often went there to study and find information for our lessons.

提案: Try to answer the question more directly, even if you are unsure. You can give a general opinion or make a comparison, using linking words to structure your response clearly.

例: Although I'm not from a Chinese community and don't know their habits well, I believe that children in many cultures, including China, often visit libraries to support their learning and interests.

× I'm not that kind of person who really love to read a lot of books and prefer to go library in a regular basis.

✓ I'm not that kind of person who really loves to read a lot of books and prefers to go to the library on a regular basis.

The subject 'person' is singular, so the verbs 'love' and 'prefer' must be in the third person singular form 'loves' and 'prefers'. Also, the phrase 'go library' is missing the preposition 'to', and 'in a regular basis' should be 'on a regular basis' (preposition correction).

× prefer to go library in a regular basis

✓ prefer to go to the library on a regular basis

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Also, the correct preposition for frequency expressions like 'regular basis' is 'on', not 'in'.

× I really love to try some books that might connect with my interest and my hobbies or my regular life activities.

✓ I really love to try some books that might connect to my interests, my hobbies, or my regular life activities.

The verb 'connect' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' rather than 'with' in this context. Also, 'interest' should be plural 'interests' to match 'hobbies' and 'activities'.

× I prefer the most is sports related magazine.

✓ The magazine I prefer the most is sports-related magazine.

The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity. Also, 'sports related' should be hyphenated as 'sports-related' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× I love to follow the traditional and also at the same time heritage related articles or books.

✓ I love to follow traditional and heritage-related articles or books.

The phrase 'at the same time' is unnecessary and awkward here. Also, 'heritage related' should be hyphenated as 'heritage-related' when used as an adjective.

× When I was a child, I don't think I used to go to the library in a regular basis.

✓ When I was a child, I don't think I used to go to the library on a regular basis.

The phrase 'in a regular basis' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' for frequency expressions like 'regular basis'.

× But during the school time, I went to the library with my friends and spent a lot of time in the library just just to figure out a lot of things related to our studies and at the same time.

✓ But during school time, I went to the library with my friends and spent a lot of time there just to figure out many things related to our studies.

The phrase 'during the school time' is better as 'during school time'. The repetition of 'just' is an error. The phrase 'at the same time' is unnecessary and incomplete here. 'A lot of things' can be improved to 'many things' for formality.

× It's very difficult for me to answer to this question as I am not belong from a Chinese community and I don't have that much idea about their about their schedule or routine so as well as their preference.

✓ It's very difficult for me to answer this question as I do not belong to the Chinese community and I don't have much idea about their schedule, routine, or preferences.

The phrase 'answer to this question' should be 'answer this question' (no 'to'). 'I am not belong' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not belong'. The phrase 'about their about their' is a repetition error. 'So as well as their preference' is awkward and unclear; rephrased for clarity.

× So I don't actually answer to this question but I think in every culture.

✓ So I can't actually answer this question, but I think in every culture...

Again, 'answer to this question' should be 'answer this question'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'can't' clarifies inability to answer. The phrase 'but I think in every culture' is incomplete and should be finished or rephrased for clarity.