Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and grammatically correct by using proper tenses and avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library on weekends because it is a quiet place where I can easily find information. Additionally, I enjoy drinking a cup of coffee while reading, which makes the experience relaxing.

提案: Your answer is clear but somewhat repetitive and lacks linking words. Try to combine your ideas using linking phrases and provide more specific details to enrich your response.

例: Usually, I read books in the library, especially about history, because it is a quiet place where I can concentrate and feel peaceful.

提案: There are several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases in your answer. Use correct past tense forms and clarify your points. Also, try to avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

例: Actually, I did not go to the library when I was a child because it was far from my home, and my parents were too busy to take me there.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more formal language and clearer sentence structures. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I am not very sure, but I believe that many Chinese children prefer using e-books and online resources because it is more convenient than visiting a library.

× I was free on the weekends and I read books there.

✓ I was free on the weekends and I read books there.

This sentence is correct in past tense and fits the context, so no correction is needed.

× It was very quiet place

✓ It was a very quiet place

The noun 'place' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× I will easily able to get information about the things I want to know

✓ I will be easily able to get information about the things I want to know

The modal verb 'will' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'be' to form the future tense of 'be able to'.

× and I also drink a cup of coffee and I enjoy.

✓ and I also drink a cup of coffee and enjoy it.

The sentence lacks an object for 'enjoy'. Adding 'it' clarifies what is being enjoyed and improves sentence structure.

× Mostly I read books in the library.

✓ Mostly, I read books in the library.

Adding a comma after 'Mostly' improves readability; the sentence is otherwise correct.

× I like reading the books and I get information about the history

✓ I like reading books and I get information about history

When speaking generally, 'books' and 'history' do not require the definite article 'the'.

× and also it is a very quiet place and I get peace whenever I go to the library.

✓ and also it is a very quiet place and I get peace whenever I go to the library.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× It is very good place.

✓ It is a very good place.

The singular countable noun 'place' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× I did not went to the library when I was a kid

✓ I did not go to the library when I was a kid

After 'did not', the base form of the verb 'go' should be used, not the past tense 'went'.

× So it was very hard to for me to go to library

✓ So it was very hard for me to go to the library

The preposition 'for' should not be preceded by 'to'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'library' as it is a specific place.

× I did not have license of anything.

✓ I did not have a license for anything.

The singular countable noun 'license' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'for' is the correct preposition to use with 'license'.

× And so my parents have to take me to library.

✓ And so my parents had to take me to the library.

The tense should be past ('had to') to match the past context. Also, 'the' is needed before 'library'.

× So they are very busy that's why I did not.

✓ So they were very busy; that's why I did not.

The tense should be past ('were') to match the past context of the sentence.

× I don't know much about the Chinese kids but umm, from my thinking I think they did not prefer to go to the library.

✓ I don't know much about Chinese kids but, in my opinion, I think they do not prefer to go to the library.

'From my thinking' is incorrect; 'in my opinion' is the correct phrase. Also, present tense 'do not prefer' fits better when expressing a general truth.

× They more use ebooks and get online information because it is much easier than going to library and getting the information.

✓ They use ebooks more and get information online because it is much easier than going to the library and getting information.

The adverb 'more' should follow the verb 'use'. 'Get online information' is better expressed as 'get information online'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'library' and 'information' is uncountable, so 'the' is not needed before it.