Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper sentence structures and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about your library visits.

例: Yes, I usually go to the library every week, especially when I have free time between classes. I enjoy reading historical books there because they help me learn more about the past.

提案: Improve your answer by organizing it clearly with linking words and correct grammar. Be specific about your activities and avoid repetition.

例: When I go to the library, I usually read newspapers to stay updated on international and national news. Additionally, I sometimes study engineering subjects there to improve my knowledge.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using proper tenses and linking words. Provide clear reasons and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I enjoyed reading newspapers and looking at the pictures. It was very interesting for me at that time.

提案: Clarify your answer by completing your sentences and using linking words. Be more specific about what Chinese kids study and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to study, especially technical subjects. They are quick learners and use the library to improve their knowledge of new technologies and various fields.

× Yes, mostly I go library to read their books in every week.

✓ Yes, mostly I go to the library to read their books every week.

The preposition 'to' is required after the verb 'go' when indicating a destination. Also, 'in every week' is incorrect; it should be 'every week' without 'in'.

× Yes, mostly I go library to read their books in every week.

✓ Yes, mostly I go to the library to read its books every week.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect when referring to the library; 'its' is the correct possessive pronoun for singular nouns like 'library'.

× Sometime when we are free and no subject to no any period.

✓ Sometimes when we are free and have no subject or period.

The word 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. The phrase 'no subject to no any period' is incorrect; it should be 'have no subject or period' to express absence properly.

× Sometime when we are free and no subject to no any period.

✓ Sometimes when we are free and have no subject or period, I go to the library to read some historical books.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. Adding 'I go to the library to read some historical books' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× Definitely when we go to library to read the books newspapers because the everyday newspaper I have to read there to awareness about international news and national news and and also sometime engineering subjects.

✓ Definitely, when we go to the library to read books and newspapers because I have to read the daily newspaper there to be aware of international and national news, and also sometimes engineering subjects.

The preposition 'to' is missing after 'go'. 'The books newspapers' is incorrect; it should be 'books and newspapers'. 'Everyday newspaper' should be 'daily newspaper'. 'To awareness about' is incorrect; it should be 'to be aware of'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'.

× Yes, of course, when I was a kid, I'm very interested to go library because the mostly I read their newspaper and see the pictures.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a kid, I was very interested in going to the library because mostly I read their newspapers and looked at the pictures.

The tense should be past ('was' instead of 'am'). 'Interested to go' should be 'interested in going'. 'Go library' needs the preposition 'to' ('go to the library'). 'Newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers' if referring to multiple issues. 'See' should be past tense 'looked at' to match past context.

× Yes, of course, when I was a kid, I'm very interested to go library because the mostly I read their newspaper and see the pictures.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a kid, I was very interested in going to the library because mostly I read their newspapers and looked at the pictures.

The phrase 'interested to go' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in going'. Also, 'go library' requires the preposition 'to' as in 'go to the library'.

× This is a very interesting thing that time for me when I was kid.

✓ This was a very interesting thing for me at that time when I was a kid.

The sentence lacks proper tense agreement and prepositions. 'Is' should be 'was' to match past tense. 'That time' should be 'at that time'. 'When I was kid' needs the article 'a' before 'kid'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× So also this is.

✓ So, this was also interesting.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'this was also interesting' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× Chinese kids mostly go to the library for study, technical study.

✓ Chinese kids mostly go to the library to study, especially technical subjects.

The phrase 'for study, technical study' is awkward. It is better to say 'to study, especially technical subjects' for clarity and correctness.

× They are very fast in technical study and also increasing their technologies and different types of.

✓ They are very good at technical studies and also improving their technology skills and knowledge of different types.

'Fast in technical study' is incorrect; 'good at technical studies' is better. 'Increasing their technologies' is incorrect; it should be 'improving their technology skills'. The phrase 'different types of' is incomplete and needs clarification.