Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words like 'uh' and 'you know'. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'offers', you can say 'provides a variety of books and a peaceful environment for studying.'

例: Yes, I often go to the Annapurna Library, which is about five minutes from here. It provides a wide range of books and a peaceful environment, making it an ideal place for studying.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and ends abruptly. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I prefer' and complete your thoughts fully. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically.

例: I usually study physics and practice maths in the library because the quiet environment and available resources help me focus better. Since I struggle with these subjects, studying there has improved my grades significantly compared to studying at home.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases and filler words like 'uh'. Try to be more precise and avoid unnecessary hesitation. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'a self wear many books were placed in a peacefully' which is unclear. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: If I remember correctly, I first visited the Annapurna Library when I was eight years old. It was close to my home, and I enjoyed the peaceful atmosphere and the wide selection of books available.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases like 'Fanny's kids' and grammatical errors such as 'goes to go to'. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more precise. Also, try to provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: As a Nepali, I am not sure about Chinese children, but I believe many of them visit libraries frequently to improve their English skills since it is not their native language.

× It offers you various kind of books.

✓ It offers you various kinds of books.

The word 'various' should be followed by a plural noun when referring to multiple types, so 'kinds' is correct instead of 'kind'.

× It's really good, uh, library.

✓ It's a really good library.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'library'. This is an article error but also relates to singular noun usage.

× You know, it's really a good and it, it offers you a peaceful environment to study in peace and many.

✓ You know, it's really good and it offers you a peaceful environment to study in peace and more.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'A good' needs a noun after it or should be 'really good'. Also, 'and many' is incomplete; 'and more' fits better here.

× Since I struggle with this subject, the quiet environment and available resources help me improve my grades.

✓ Since I struggle with this subject, the quiet environment and available resources help me improve my grades.

No correction needed here as the pronouns are used correctly.

× Studying at home didn't help me concentrate as much, so I prefer spending time in the library and usually I prefer this subject when I'm in.

✓ Studying at home didn't help me concentrate as much, so I prefer spending time in the library and usually prefer this subject when I'm there.

The phrase 'prefer this subject when I'm in' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'prefer this subject when I'm there' to clarify the location.

× If my memory serves me right, I think I was 8 when I went to the library for the first ever time.

✓ If my memory serves me right, I think I was 8 when I went to the library for the very first time.

The phrase 'first ever time' is awkward; 'very first time' is the correct expression.

× Uh, a self wear many books were placed in a peacefully.

✓ Uh, a shelf where many books were placed peacefully.

The phrase 'a self wear' is incorrect; it should be 'a shelf where'. Also, 'in a peacefully' is incorrect; 'peacefully' is an adverb and should not be preceded by 'a'.

× Chinese kids often goes to go to the library 'cause, uh, English is not their native language, so they have to go to the library to discuss it and to practice it even more.

✓ Chinese kids often go to the library because English is not their native language, so they have to go to the library to discuss it and to practice it even more.

The verb 'goes' does not agree with the plural subject 'kids'. It should be 'go'. Also, 'to go to the library' is redundant after 'often go to the library'.