Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I also' and be more specific about what you do at the library. Keep your answer concise and natural by combining related ideas.

例: Yes, I often visit the library to read various books, especially scientific ones. Sometimes, I also use the library's facilities for other activities like studying or group discussions.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'assigned mails' and 'quick environment fee from distractions.' Try to use clear and correct expressions, and organize your answer logically with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I usually study and complete my assignments in the library because it provides a quiet environment free from distractions. Additionally, I borrow books related to my courses to deepen my understanding, and I use the computers and other resources for research purposes.

提案: Your answer includes an unrelated sentence 'Please help me develop a lab for learning,' which disrupts coherence. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Keep your answer focused and clear.

例: Yes, I often visited the library as a child. I enjoyed reading storybooks and exploring various topics. The quiet and peaceful environment made it an ideal place for me to learn.

提案: Your answer is generally good but ends abruptly with 'It is.' Try to complete your sentences fully and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid unnecessary pauses or incomplete thoughts.

例: Yes, many Chinese children often visit libraries, especially in urban areas where access is easier. Libraries offer a quiet environment for studying and a wide range of books that support both their schoolwork and personal interests, particularly during weekends and holidays.

× Yes, I frequently go to the library and read books. I also read scientific books in the library and I also play.

✓ Yes, I frequently go to the library and read books. I also read scientific books in the library and play.

The repetition of 'I also' before 'play' is redundant and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing the second 'I also' improves clarity and conciseness.

× The library to study and complete my assigned mails because it offers a quick environment fee from distractions.

✓ I go to the library to study and complete my assigned tasks because it offers a quiet environment free from distractions.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb, making it incomplete. 'Mails' is incorrect in this context; 'tasks' is more appropriate. 'Quick environment fee' is a misphrasing; it should be 'quiet environment free'. Correcting these issues forms a complete and meaningful sentence.

× Sometimes I also borrow books related to my courses to depend to deepen my understanding of the subjects Umm.

✓ Sometimes I also borrow books related to my courses to help deepen my understanding of the subjects.

The phrase 'to depend to deepen' is incorrect and unclear. Replacing it with 'to help deepen' clarifies the purpose. Also, 'Umm' is an interjection and should be omitted in formal speech.

× Additionally, I use the libraries, computers and resources for research purpose which helps.

✓ Additionally, I use the library's computers and resources for research purposes, which helps.

'Libraries' should be singular possessive 'library's' to indicate the computers and resources belong to the library. 'Research purpose' should be plural 'research purposes'. Adding a comma before 'which helps' improves sentence clarity.

× I used to visit a library quite often when I was a child. I enjoyed reading story books and exploring different topics. Please help me develop a lab for learning.

✓ I used to visit the library quite often when I was a child. I enjoyed reading storybooks and exploring different topics. It helped me develop a love for learning.

'A library' should be 'the library' to refer to a specific place. 'Story books' is better as one word 'storybooks'. The sentence 'Please help me develop a lab for learning' is unclear and likely a misstatement; it is corrected to 'It helped me develop a love for learning' to convey a meaningful idea.

× The quiet and peaceful environment of the library make it a perfect place for me.

✓ The quiet and peaceful environment of the library makes it a perfect place for me.

The subject 'environment' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make' to agree in number.