Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“I not often go”应为“I don't often go”。此外，句子结构较为混乱，重复使用“about”，且表达不够简洁。建议加强语法基础，避免重复，并用更自然的表达方式回答问题。

例: I don't often go to the library, but recently I have been going more frequently to review for exams. We are currently studying Russian literature, so I need to memorize and summarize the plots written by the authors.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，且有过多口语填充词如“you know”。建议减少口语化表达，使用连贯的句子结构，并用连接词使内容更有逻辑性。

例: In the library, I usually look up information and sometimes take short naps because university life is quite stressful. I also spend time reading and researching for my weekly presentations.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰且句子断裂。建议学习正确的时态和句子结构，避免使用口语化的“you know”，并使回答更连贯。

例: I never went to the library when I was a kid, but I did visit a museum in Moscow once. I found the library beautiful and wanted to hang out there. Usually, I spent time with friends hiking and enjoying nature.

提案: 回答中语法错误严重，句子不完整且表达混乱。建议加强句子完整性和语法准确性，避免重复和不连贯的表达。

例: Chinese kids often go to the library because they have a lot of studies. School is very demanding, so after classes, many students go straight to the library to study.

× I not often go to the library, but currently yes, I have to review from the previous exams and to improve my marks.

✓ I do not often go to the library, but currently yes, I have to review the previous exams and improve my marks.

句中缺少助动词“do”来构成否定句，且“exams”前不需要介词“from”，应直接用“review the previous exams”。

× We are studying recently about about the Russian literature, so we have to memorize and summarize every plot before done by the artist and the author.

✓ We have been studying recently about Russian literature, so we have to memorize and summarize every plot before it is done by the artist and the author.

“are studying recently”时态不准确，改为现在完成进行时“have been studying”更合适；“before done”缺少主语和被动结构，应改为“before it is done”。

× I usually just check in the information and I have a little nap cause the school days know that, you know, the the day from the university is actually quite stressful and basically it's reading and have to research for my next week's, you know, presentation 'cause we based on every week we have presentation.

✓ I usually just check the information and have a little nap because school days are stressful, you know. The days at university are actually quite stressful, and basically it's reading and researching for my next week's presentation because we have presentations every week.

“check in the information”应为“check the information”；“cause the school days know that”语义不通，改为“because school days are stressful”；“the day from the university”应为“the days at university”；“have to research for”改为“researching for”；句子结构混乱，需拆分并调整。

× I've never ever been to library when I was a kid, only to lie browse in a Moscow museum.

✓ I've never ever been to the library when I was a kid, only to browse a Moscow museum.

“to lie browse”错误，应为“to browse”；“library”前缺少定冠词“the”；时态使用正确。

× Just only one time that I've been to the library 'cause that's actually aesthetic and stunning, beautiful.

✓ I've only been to the library once because it's actually aesthetic, stunning, and beautiful.

“Just only one time that”表达不自然，改为“I've only been to the library once”；形容词排列需用逗号分隔。

× I was just wanna hang out, you know? I was hanging out with friends all the time and going hiking. Enjoy the nature. I'm not going abroad.

✓ I just wanted to hang out, you know? I was hanging out with friends all the time and going hiking, enjoying nature. I'm not going abroad.

“was just wanna”应为“just wanted to”；“Enjoy the nature”应为“enjoying nature”，且与前句连贯。

× Chinese kids do love to go to library 'cause we have more studies compared to the Western kids 'cause we're actually the one of the hardest in school in in the whole world that's stressed up.

✓ Chinese kids do love to go to the library because we have more studies compared to Western kids because we're actually one of the hardest-working students in school in the whole world, which is stressful.

“go to library”缺少定冠词“the”；“the one of the hardest”应为“one of the hardest”；句子结构需调整使语义清晰。

× So after the school we have to go to the straight up to the library. Then we have.

✓ So after school, we have to go straight to the library. Then we study there.

“go to the straight up to the library”结构混乱，应为“go straight to the library”；“Then we have.”句子不完整，需补充完整内容。