Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and structured. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar for clarity.

例: No, I don't often go to the library. Instead, I usually study at home using my cell phone because it allows me to save time and concentrate better on my lessons.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Provide specific details about your activities in the library.

例: I usually go to the library to study because it is quiet and helps me focus. For example, when I have an exam, I prepare my notes there to concentrate better.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Provide specific details about your experience.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because my father worked there. I enjoyed going there and made many friends.

提案: Your answer is vague and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and complete your sentences.

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids specifically, but I believe that children worldwide often use libraries because they are good places for studying and learning new things.

× It's allowed me to have more time and focus on other things inside of my lesson.

✓ It has allowed me to have more time and focus on other things inside my lesson.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'It's allowed' which is a contraction of 'It is allowed'. The correct form here is the present perfect 'It has allowed' to indicate an action that has an effect up to now.

× It's allowed me to have more time and focus on other things inside of my lesson.

✓ It has allowed me to have more time and focus on other things inside my lesson.

The preposition 'inside of' is incorrect in this context; the correct preposition is 'inside' without 'of'.

× The library is a quiet place and suitable place for studying for focus on your lesson actually and when I have a exam, I go to the library and I prepared my.

✓ The library is a quiet and suitable place for studying and focusing on your lessons. Actually, when I have an exam, I go to the library and prepare.

The original sentence has run-on structure and awkward phrasing. 'For studying for focus' is incorrect; it should be 'for studying and focusing'. 'I have a exam' should be 'I have an exam' due to article usage. 'I prepared my' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'I prepare' to match present tense and complete the thought.

× when I have a exam

✓ when I have an exam

The article 'a' is incorrect before a word starting with a vowel sound; it should be 'an'.

× I go to the library and I prepared my.

✓ I go to the library and prepare.

The verb 'prepared' is past tense but the sentence context requires present tense 'prepare' to match 'I go'.

× Yes, I used to go to the library because my father worked there and I enjoy about enjoyed about going to the library and there I have had a lot of friend.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the library because my father worked there and I enjoyed going to the library. There, I had a lot of friends.

The phrase 'I enjoy about enjoyed about' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'I enjoyed going'. 'I have had a lot of friend' is incorrect; 'friend' should be plural 'friends' and past simple 'had' fits better here.

× I enjoy about enjoyed about going to the library

✓ I enjoyed going to the library

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used twice; the correct expression is simply 'enjoyed going' without 'about'.

× I have had a lot of friend.

✓ I had a lot of friends.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' when preceded by 'a lot of'. Also, past simple 'had' is more appropriate here.

× About Chinese kids, I don't have any information, but I think the people around of the world interested in studying and using the library because the libraries place that's.

✓ About Chinese kids, I don't have any information, but I think people around the world are interested in studying and using the library because libraries are places like that.

The phrase 'around of the world' is incorrect; it should be 'around the world'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and awkward; 'libraries place that's' is corrected to 'libraries are places like that' for clarity.

× people around of the world interested in studying and using the library

✓ people around the world are interested in studying and using the library

The verb 'interested' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present tense passive voice correctly.