Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors such as 'oftenly visited' and missing articles like 'the library'. Try to make your sentences more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library in my hometown because it is very popular there. I usually visit early in the morning when the environment is peaceful. I enjoy reading different kinds of books, including storybooks, comics, and study materials, which help me relax.

提案: Your answer is quite repetitive and lacks clear structure. Avoid repeating the same information and focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and check grammar, for example, 'oftenly' should be 'often'.

例: Usually, I spend my time in the library reading different types of books like storybooks, comics, and study materials. This helps me relax and enjoy the peaceful surroundings, especially in the early morning.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing, especially the last part about study material and story books. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct grammar. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain your preferences as a child with specific examples.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I loved exploring new places. I enjoyed reading comics and storybooks more than study materials at that time.

提案: Your answer contains grammatical errors and vague statements. Avoid generalizations like 'they are very smart' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because they enjoy reading and learning new things. Libraries provide a quiet place for them to study and explore different kinds of books.

× Well, library is very popular in my hometown and I oftenly visited to the library in early morning because in morning the environment is really peaceful.

✓ Well, the library is very popular in my hometown and I often visited the library in the early morning because in the morning the environment is really peaceful.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' and 'early morning' to specify a particular library and time. Also, 'visited to' is incorrect; 'visited' does not need 'to'. 'Oftenly' is not a correct word; the correct adverb is 'often'. 'In morning' should be 'in the morning' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, library is very popular in my hometown and I oftenly visited to the library in early morning because in morning the environment is really peaceful. Other than this, I read various kinds of books there such as story books, comic books and also study material which helps me to relax.

✓ Well, the library is very popular in my hometown and I often visited the library in the early morning because in the morning the environment is really peaceful. Other than this, I read various kinds of books there such as story books, comic books and also study materials which help me to relax.

'Study material' is an uncountable noun but here it refers to different types, so the plural form 'study materials' is more appropriate. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'study materials'.

× As library is famous for reading books and I oftenly visited the library in early morning and there I do various and there I read various kinds of books such as story books, comic books and study material which helps me to relax and I feel peaceful there and the surrounding is really good.

✓ As the library is famous for reading books and I often visited the library in the early morning, there I do various activities and read various kinds of books such as story books, comic books and study materials which help me to relax. I feel peaceful there and the surroundings are really good.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' and 'early morning'. 'Oftenly' is incorrect; use 'often'. 'Do various' is incomplete; 'do various activities' is correct. 'Study material' should be plural 'study materials' to match the context. 'Helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural 'study materials'. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' and 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject.

× Definitely when I was a kid I loved to explore various kinds of places and library is one of those. And in library I love to read comics, books as I was a child, so I was more concentrated on study material, not study material on story books.

✓ Definitely, when I was a kid I loved to explore various kinds of places and the library was one of those. And in the library I loved to read comics and books as I was a child, so I was more concentrated on study materials, not story books.

The tense should be consistent in past tense when talking about childhood. 'Library is' should be 'the library was'. 'Love' should be 'loved' to match past tense. 'Study material' should be plural 'study materials'. The phrase 'not study material on story books' is unclear; corrected to 'not story books' for clarity.

× Definitely Chinese kids loves to explore the libraries as they are very smart. It is well known in all the world. So they often visit to the library and read various kinds of books.

✓ Definitely Chinese kids love to explore libraries as they are very smart. It is well known all over the world. So they often visit the library and read various kinds of books.

'Kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. 'The libraries' can be 'libraries' in general. 'Visit to the library' is incorrect; 'visit the library' is correct. 'In all the world' should be 'all over the world' for correct idiomatic expression.