Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议回答时注意句子结构的完整性和流畅性。可以直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节丰富内容，避免重复。

例: Yes, I used to go to the school library every day before I graduated. I often studied there with my girlfriend, and those were precious times for me.

提案: 回答时要注意语法和表达的准确性，避免重复和不连贯。可以先直接回答问题，再用连接词补充细节，使表达更自然。

例: In the library, I usually read books and do my homework. However, after graduation, I rarely go to the library because there isn't one near my house, so I usually study at home.

提案: 回答时要注意句子完整和逻辑清晰，避免重复和语法错误。可以先直接回答，再用连接词补充具体情况。

例: No, I didn't often go to the library as a kid because the library in my primary school was usually closed and only opened for special activities.

提案: 回答时要避免口头语和不完整的句子，注意表达清晰和连贯。可以先给出自己的观点，再用具体原因支持。

例: I think many Chinese kids often go to the library, but when I was a child living in the countryside, poor living conditions made it difficult for us to visit libraries.

× Yes, actually I graduated now, but before I graduated I I usually went to the school library everyday and with my girlfriend we're learning in there and that was a precious time for me.

✓ Yes, actually I have graduated now, but before I graduated I usually went to the school library every day and with my girlfriend we learned there and that was a precious time for me.

The phrase 'I graduated now' is incorrect because 'now' suggests present time, but 'graduated' is past tense. The present perfect 'have graduated' is appropriate to indicate a recent past action with present relevance. 'Everyday' should be 'every day' as two words when meaning 'each day'. 'We're learning in there' should be 'we learned there' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'I I' is a repetition error.

× Yes, actually I graduated now, but before I graduated I I usually went to the school library everyday and with my girlfriend we're learning in there and that was a precious time for me.

✓ Yes, actually I have graduated now, but before I graduated I usually went to the school library every day and with my girlfriend we learned there and that was a precious time for me.

The phrase 'learning in there' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'learned there' without 'in'. 'Learned there' correctly indicates the location of the action.

× Oh, in the library of course. I read and sometimes do my homework. And actually after they graduated, after the graduation I don't go library frequently 'cause there isn't a library near my house, so I starting at home usually.

✓ Oh, in the library of course. I read and sometimes do my homework. And actually after graduation I don't go to the library frequently because there isn't a library near my house, so I usually study at home.

The phrase 'go library' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, 'after they graduated' is unclear and unnecessary; 'after graduation' suffices. 'Starting at home' is incorrect; 'study at home' is appropriate. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× And actually after they graduated, after the graduation I don't go library frequently 'cause there isn't a library near my house, so I starting at home usually.

✓ And actually after graduation I don't go to the library frequently because there isn't a library near my house, so I usually study at home.

The phrase 'I starting at home usually' is incorrect; the correct present tense form is 'I usually study at home'. The verb 'starting' is a present participle and does not fit here.

× No, actually there was a library in my primary school, but it's not open for everyone.

✓ No, actually there was a library in my primary school, but it was not open to everyone.

The phrase 'not open for everyone' should be 'not open to everyone' because 'open to' is the correct preposition to indicate accessibility.

× So sometimes we do have some kind of interesting activities in there, but not normally just it's actually it's closed all the time, so I don't.

✓ So sometimes we did have some kind of interesting activities there, but normally it was actually closed all the time, so I didn't go.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It's closed all the time' should be past tense 'it was closed all the time' to match the past context. 'I don't' is incomplete; it should be 'I didn't go' or similar. Also, 'in there' can be simplified to 'there'.

× Umm, I think so umm, but uh, in my childhood there there wasn't cause eyebrow.

✓ Umm, I think so, but in my childhood there wasn't one because...

The phrase 'there wasn't cause eyebrow' is unclear and likely a mishearing or error. Assuming the intended meaning is 'there wasn't one because...', the singular 'wasn't' matches singular 'one'. The phrase needs clarification.

× I born and raised in a countryside called so my poor living condition didn't allow us to go to the library, but Chinese.

✓ I was born and raised in a countryside called [name], so my poor living conditions didn't allow us to go to the library, but Chinese children...

The verb 'born' needs the auxiliary 'was' to form the passive past tense 'was born'. 'Living condition' should be plural 'living conditions' to indicate general circumstances. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.