Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and using clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't visit libraries often, but I like to go on weekends when I have free time because I enjoy reading books there.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas better by using linking words and clearer sentence structures. Be specific about the types of books you read and why.

例: I usually read books in the library that I can't find online or don't own. For example, I often read work-related and study materials there because they are not easily accessible elsewhere.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding hesitation. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I didn't visit libraries often as a child because there was none in my area. Instead, I spent time at school with my friends, where I enjoyed reading books together.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words and try to express your opinion more confidently and clearly. Use linking words to structure your answer.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids specifically, but I think many children nowadays prefer watching TV and using mobile phones rather than going to the library.

× No, I don't often go for libraries, but on weekends whenever I have time, I prefer to go to libraries because I love reading books whenever I have time, so I prefer to read books in the libraries.

✓ No, I don't often go to libraries, but on weekends whenever I have time, I prefer to go to libraries because I love reading books whenever I have time, so I prefer to read books in the libraries.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'go' in this context. The correct preposition to indicate visiting a place is 'to'. Therefore, 'go for libraries' should be corrected to 'go to libraries'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Mostly I read books in the library because some of the books which I never find on the Internet and I don't have that books, I prefer to read books over there.

✓ Mostly I read books in the library because some of the books I can never find on the Internet and I don't have those books, so I prefer to read them there.

The original sentence has structural issues and incorrect pronoun usage. 'Which I never find' should be 'I can never find' for clarity. 'That books' is incorrect; it should be 'those books' to match plural form. Also, 'over there' is better replaced with 'there' for naturalness. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And some of the books according to my workplace and according to uh, study.

✓ And some of the books are related to my workplace and my studies.

The phrase 'according to' is incorrectly used here. 'According to' is used to cite sources or opinions, not to indicate relation. The correct phrase is 'related to' or 'about'. Also, the sentence lacks a verb, so 'are' is added for completeness.

× So I prefer to read their types of books over there.

✓ So I prefer to read those types of books there.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to 'types of books'. The correct demonstrative pronoun is 'those' to indicate specific types previously mentioned. Also, 'over there' can be simplified to 'there' for naturalness.

× When I was a kid, I didn't go for library too often because there was no library available in my area that time.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library too often because there was no library available in my area at that time.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'go' here; it should be 'go to the library'. Also, 'that time' should be 'at that time' to correctly indicate a point in time.

× I prefer to go to school over there.

✓ I preferred to go to school there.

Since the sentence refers to past time ('When I was a kid'), the verb tense should be past ('preferred'). Also, 'over there' can be simplified to 'there' for naturalness.

× I spent some time over there with my friends and I, I love to book, uh, uh, read books with them.

✓ I spent some time there with my friends, and I loved to read books with them.

The phrase 'with my friends and I' is incorrect; it should be 'with my friends'. Also, the verb tense should be past ('loved') to match the past context. The phrase 'love to book' is incorrect and corrected to 'loved to read books'.

× I don't have any idea about the Chinese kids.

✓ I don't have any idea about Chinese kids.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'Chinese kids' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× What I think, uh, nowadays kids do not like to go to the library because they prefer to uh, prefers, prefer to watch TV's and mobile phones now, so they don't like.

✓ What I think is that nowadays kids do not like to go to the library because they prefer to watch TV and use mobile phones now, so they don't like it.

The modal verb 'prefer' was incorrectly conjugated as 'prefers' and repeated. The correct form is 'prefer' for plural subject 'kids'. Also, 'TV's' is incorrect; it should be 'TV'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, adding 'is that' after 'What I think' and completing the last clause with 'it'.