Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but a bit long and slightly unclear in parts. Try to make your response more concise and directly answer the question with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I don't often go to the library because I can find most books online. Also, going there takes extra time, so I prefer digital resources unless I really need a physical book.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some unclear phrases like 'spots for suffering Internet.' Try to use clear vocabulary and structure your answer with a topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: When I visit the library, I usually use the internet to search for information because many modern libraries provide free Wi-Fi and computer stations.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating words. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because my grandma worked there and often invited me. I really enjoyed the quiet space and discovering new books.

提案: Your answer is honest but could be improved by giving a general opinion or making a reasonable guess instead of just saying you don't know. Also, try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow.

例: I'm not certain, but I think many Chinese kids do visit libraries because reading is encouraged in schools and libraries are common in cities.

× Honestly, I'm not that person who goes to the library usually because I can find almost every book that I need online and it takes too much time to go somewhere for paper one.

✓ Honestly, I'm not that person who usually goes to the library because I can find almost every book that I need online and it takes too much time to go somewhere for a paper one.

The adverb 'usually' should be placed before the verb phrase 'goes to the library' to correctly modify it. Placing 'usually' at the end of the sentence is awkward and incorrect. Also, 'for paper one' is unclear; adding 'a' before 'paper one' improves clarity.

× And if it's not that you really need, you need to spend more time for finding.

✓ And if it's not something you really need, you need to spend more time finding it.

The phrase 'spend more time for finding' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'spend more time' followed directly by a gerund without 'for'. Also, 'if it's not that you really need' is awkward; replacing with 'if it's not something you really need' improves clarity.

× In most cases, if I go there, I just umm, search some information that I need in the Internet, because in most up-to-date libraries there are some available spots for suffering Internet and something like that.

✓ In most cases, if I go there, I just, umm, search for some information that I need on the Internet, because in most up-to-date libraries there are some available spots for surfing the Internet and something like that.

The verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by the object. Also, the correct preposition is 'on the Internet' not 'in the Internet'. The phrase 'spots for suffering Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'spots for surfing the Internet'.

× Yeah, I were going.

✓ Yeah, I was going.

The subject 'I' requires the past tense verb 'was' not 'were'. 'Were' is used with plural subjects or with 'you' in past tense.

× she invited me to go there for many times.

✓ she invited me to go there many times.

The phrase 'for many times' is incorrect. The correct expression is simply 'many times' without the preposition 'for'.

× I'm not really sure that they go to the library or not because I've never been to China and I've and I don't have any friends who are Chinese or some friends that were in Asia.

✓ I'm not really sure whether they go to the library or not because I've never been to China and I don't have any friends who are Chinese or any friends who have been in Asia.

The phrase 'that they go' should be 'whether they go' to express uncertainty. The repeated 'I've and I' is a mistake and should be corrected to 'I'. Also, 'some friends that were in Asia' is better expressed as 'any friends who have been in Asia' for clarity and correctness.