Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz daha akıcı ve net olabilir. "Because I graduated from university" ifadesi yerine daha doğal bir bağlaç kullanabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi 5 cümleyi geçmeden daha etkili detaylarla zenginleştirin.

例: I don't go to the library often now because I have already graduated from university. However, when I was a student, I visited the library frequently, especially during finals. I used to spend entire days there studying to prepare for my exams.

提案: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. Daha açık ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, destekleyici detayları bağlaçlarla daha iyi bağlayabilirsiniz.

例: I usually study in the library, especially for difficult courses. For example, I had a challenging lecture about current terrorism, so I spent a lot of time there to understand the material better.

提案: Cümlenizde 'therefore' kelimesinin kullanımı uygun değil. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçları doğru kullanmalısınız.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library to read books when I was a kid. However, I don't have any specific memories from those visits, probably because I didn't enjoy it very much.

提案: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve bazı kelime hataları var. Daha net ve akıcı cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, tahminlerinizi daha mantıklı bağlaçlarla destekleyin.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but I think they often go to the library. Since Chinese people are known to be hardworking, children might develop good study habits from a young age.

× I always went to a library and spent my whole day in there.

✓ I always went to the library and spent my whole day there.

The definite article 'the' should be used before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'in there' is redundant; 'there' alone is sufficient.

× I always study something in the library, especially one of my lecture was so hard it named as current terrorist and it was the hardest lecture so I went there.

✓ I always study something in the library, especially because one of my lectures was so hard; it was called 'Current Terrorism' and it was the hardest lecture, so I went there.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'one of my lecture' should be 'one of my lectures' (plural noun), 'named as' is incorrect; 'called' is appropriate, and the sentence structure is confusing. Also, the lecture name should be capitalized and properly referenced.

× I went there for reading books, but I don't remember a specific moment in the library from my childhood memories because therefore I think that I don't really enjoy it.

✓ I went there to read books, but I don't remember a specific moment in the library from my childhood memories; therefore, I think that I didn't really enjoy it.

The phrase 'for reading books' should be 'to read books' to express purpose. 'Because therefore' is redundant; 'therefore' alone is sufficient. Also, 'don't really enjoy it' should be in past tense 'didn't really enjoy it' to match the past context.

× I think they might be because I know that Chinese people are so hardworking so maybe they are like gaining the habits for from their childhood.

✓ I think they might be because I know that Chinese people are so hardworking, so maybe they have been gaining the habits from their childhood.

The phrase 'gaining the habits for from their childhood' is incorrect. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'have been gaining' better expresses the continuous action from childhood.