Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'I like to', you can combine ideas and use linking words to make your answer more natural and concise.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is quiet and air-conditioned, which helps me concentrate. Additionally, the comfortable chairs and facilities make it a good place for group studies.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and linking words to make your response smoother and clearer.

例: I usually use the computer or participate in group studies at the library because I can study alone at home. When preparing for exams, we discuss and practice together there to improve our efficiency.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use past tense correctly and provide clearer details with linking words to improve coherence.

例: No, I did not often go to the library as a child because my schools lacked proper libraries. However, I remember visiting the Brahman library to borrow books, which was a memorable experience for me.

提案: Your answer is honest but could be more concise and fluent. Avoid repeating words and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: As a Bangladeshi, I don't have much knowledge about Chinese children, but from documentaries I've seen, they often visit libraries. However, I am not very familiar with their habits.

× I like to study there because that is quiet and air conditioned.

✓ I like to study there because it is quiet and air-conditioned.

The word 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to the library; 'it' is the correct pronoun for singular objects. Also, 'air conditioned' should be hyphenated as 'air-conditioned' when used as an adjective before a noun or in this context describing the place.

× I usually go to use the computer or specially doing group studies because studying alone I can do that at home.

✓ I usually go to use the computer or especially to do group studies because I can study alone at home.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; 'especially' is the correct adverb. Also, 'doing' should be changed to 'to do' to maintain parallel structure after 'or'. The phrase 'studying alone I can do that at home' is better rephrased as 'I can study alone at home' for clarity and correctness.

× But when we need to discuss something for our upcoming exams, we go to the library to discuss ourselves and practice more and more to be efficient at that.

✓ But when we need to discuss something for our upcoming exams, we go to the library to discuss among ourselves and practice more and more to be efficient at that.

The reflexive pronoun 'ourselves' needs a preposition 'among' to correctly express the idea of discussing with each other. Without 'among', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× No, I usually did not go to library when I was a kid because my kindergarten or my primary school did not have a proper library for studying purpose.

✓ No, I usually did not go to the library when I was a kid because my kindergarten or my primary school did not have a proper library for studying purposes.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'studying purpose' should be pluralized to 'studying purposes' to be grammatically correct.

× But I remember going to the Brahman library called something so I could borrow books from there.

✓ But I remember going to the Brahman library, or something like that, so I could borrow books from there.

The phrase 'called something' is awkward and unclear. Adding 'or something like that' clarifies the uncertainty about the name. Also, a comma is needed before this phrase for correct punctuation.

× As a Balandish citizen I do not have a better knowledge about the Chinese kids, but as I have seen on some documentaries, Chinese kids often go to the libraries, but I have not read about that much, so I I do not know very well about them.

✓ As a Balandish citizen, I do not have much knowledge about Chinese kids, but as I have seen in some documentaries, Chinese kids often go to libraries. However, I have not read much about that, so I do not know very well about them.

The phrase 'a better knowledge' is incorrect; 'much knowledge' is appropriate here. 'On some documentaries' should be 'in some documentaries' because we watch or see things 'in' documentaries. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity. The repeated 'I' is a typographical error and should be corrected.