Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the atmosphere you like in the library. For example, you can say how the quiet environment helps you concentrate.

例: Yes, I often go to the library about three to four days a week. I usually spend two to three hours there searching for books or reading because I enjoy the quiet and peaceful atmosphere, which helps me focus better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Avoid vague phrases like 'random stuff' and explain clearly what you do. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Also, avoid mentioning unrelated activities like sleeping unless you explain why.

例: In the library, I usually read books or do research for my studies. Sometimes, I stay there because it is cool and comfortable due to the air conditioning. Mostly, I focus on reading and studying while using the library's resources.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but contains some grammar mistakes. Use correct verb tenses and avoid filler words like 'like' and 'umm'. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural.

例: No, I rarely went to the library when I was a kid because I lived in a rural area where there were no libraries available.

提案: Your answer is confusing and unclear. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct grammar. Explain why Chinese kids go to the library with specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like 'pure influence the appearance'.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because reading is encouraged at school and at home. Many parents and teachers believe that reading helps children learn and improve their knowledge.

× I often go to the library for about 3 to four days a week and often go around 2 to 3 hour a a day in order to search some book and sometime I'll go there to read book as well because like the atmosphere is very.

✓ I often go to the library for about 3 to 4 days a week and often go around 2 to 3 hours a day in order to search for some books and sometimes I'll go there to read books as well because the atmosphere is very nice.

The errors involve singular and plural forms: '3 to four days' should be consistent as '3 to 4 days'; '2 to 3 hour' should be '2 to 3 hours'; 'some book' should be 'some books'; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'read book' should be 'read books'. Using correct plural forms is important for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I often go to the library for about 3 to four days a week and often go around 2 to 3 hour a a day in order to search some book and sometime I'll go there to read book as well because like the atmosphere is very.

✓ ...in order to search for some books and sometimes I'll go there to read books as well because the atmosphere is very nice.

The phrase 'search some book' is incorrect; it should be 'search for some books' because 'search' is followed by 'for' and the object in plural form. Also, 'like the atmosphere is very' is incomplete; it should be 'because the atmosphere is very nice' to complete the thought.

× Sometime I go to race because like it has the air conditioner there so it's make me like cool and have a software also.

✓ Sometimes I go to rest because it has air conditioning there so it makes me feel cool and there is software also.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Go to race' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'go to rest' fits better. 'Air conditioner' should be 'air conditioning' for general reference. 'It's make me like cool' should be 'it makes me feel cool' for subject-verb agreement and correct expression. 'Have a software' should be 'there is software' or 'there is a software program'.

× I just like 2 random stuff like reading some books someday and the next day I just go to research something.

✓ I just like two random things like reading some books some days and the next day I just go to research something.

'2 random stuff' is incorrect; 'stuff' is uncountable, so 'two random things' is better. 'Sometime' should be 'some days' to indicate occasional days. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, when I was like when I were a kid, I rarely go to library because like back in the day I was a student in rural areas.

✓ No, when I was a kid, I rarely went to the library because back in the day I was a student in rural areas.

'When I were a kid' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was a kid' for subject-verb agreement in past tense. 'I rarely go' should be 'I rarely went' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Go to library' should be 'go to the library' with the definite article.

× So umm in the rural area they didn't exist like the library, so I did not go.

✓ So in the rural area, there didn't exist a library, so I did not go.

The phrase 'they didn't exist like the library' is incorrect. It should be 'there didn't exist a library' or better 'there was no library'. This corrects the use of 'there be' structure to indicate existence.

× Yes they do. They often go to library and things because they pure influence the the appearance and in China I think read the book is made children want to do that also.

✓ Yes, they do. They often go to the library and other places because they are influenced by their peers and in China I think reading books makes children want to do that also.

'Go to library' should be 'go to the library' with the definite article. 'They pure influence the the appearance' is unclear; likely intended 'they are influenced by their peers'. 'Read the book is made children want to do that' should be 'reading books makes children want to do that' for correct verb form and subject-verb agreement.