Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make your answer more natural and effective. For example, mention why you like reading or what kind of books you prefer.

例: Yes, I usually visit the library once or twice a month because I enjoy reading. For instance, I recently read a book called Melody Towers, which I found very interesting. I often go with my friends, and we spend time exploring different genres.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. Begin with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Provide specific details about your activities in the library to enrich your answer.

例: In the library, I usually spend one or two hours reading books. Moreover, I often go with my friends, and we enjoy discussing what we read, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Try to speak more fluently without filler words and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and add specific reasons why you liked going to the library.

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid, especially during school time. I borrowed many books and enjoyed the quiet environment, which helped me concentrate better on my studies.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Provide more specific examples of what Chinese kids do in the library to make your answer richer.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often visit the library to read books. Additionally, they use the library to complete assignments and conduct research, which helps them with their studies.

× Yes, I usually go to the library once a month or twice a month.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library once or twice a month.

The phrase 'once a month or twice a month' is redundant and awkward. It is better to say 'once or twice a month' to express frequency clearly and concisely.

× Usually I do in library, uh, reading books.

✓ Usually, I read books in the library.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. The correct structure is subject + verb + object + prepositional phrase. 'I do in library, reading books' is incorrect; it should be 'I read books in the library.'

× I spend, uh, some more times, uh, like one or two hours in the library.

✓ I spend about one or two hours in the library.

The phrase 'some more times' is incorrect and unnatural. The correct expression is 'about one or two hours' to indicate approximate duration. Also, 'times' is not appropriate here as it refers to frequency, not duration.

× when I was kid, uh, in my school time, I went to the school library

✓ when I was a kid, uh, during my school time, I went to the school library

The phrase 'when I was kid' is missing the article 'a' before 'kid'. Also, 'in my school time' is better expressed as 'during my school time' to indicate the period.

× and also with my friends I went to, we went to a library

✓ and also, with my friends, we went to a library

The original sentence lacks proper commas to separate clauses and phrases, making it confusing. Adding commas clarifies the meaning and improves readability.

× and uh, it feels more quite and we can concentrate, uh.

✓ and uh, it feels quieter and we can concentrate, uh.

The word 'quite' is an adverb meaning 'completely' or 'very', but here the adjective 'quiet' is needed to describe the library. The comparative form 'quieter' is appropriate to compare the library's noise level.