Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "I don't really go to the library very often," you can say "I rarely go to the library." Also, use 'on the outskirts' instead of 'in an outskirts'. Keep your answer concise and natural.

例: I rarely go to the library because my house is located on the outskirts of Bangkok, which is quite far from the main libraries in the city.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently and improve sentence flow. Also, add linking words to connect ideas. For example, say "When I was in high school, I often went to the library early in the morning. One of my favorite activities was catching up on trends in magazines."

例: When I was in high school, I often went to the library early in the morning. One of my favorite activities was catching up on trends in magazines.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and improving vocabulary. For example, instead of "a wide ranges of novels and fictions," say "a wide range of novels and fiction." Also, try to use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, when I was younger and had access to libraries, I went almost every day because I loved reading. Libraries offered a wide range of novels and fiction that I enjoyed.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and avoid repeating phrases. For example, instead of repeating 'go to the library,' you can say 'visit libraries.' Also, use 'children' instead of 'a child' for consistency.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often visit libraries because their parents prioritize reading. Therefore, they encourage their children to become avid readers by promoting library visits.

× my house is located in an outskirts of Bangkok

✓ my house is located in the outskirts of Bangkok

The word 'outskirts' is a plural noun that requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific area. Using 'an' is incorrect because 'outskirts' is not singular and countable in this context.

× the activities that I found most favorable is was to catch up on some trends in magazines

✓ the activities that I found most favorable were catching up on some trends in magazines

The subject 'activities' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'is was'. Also, 'to catch up' should be changed to the gerund form 'catching up' to correctly function as the object of the verb 'were'.

× the activities that I found most favorable is was to catch up on some trends in magazines

✓ the activities that I found most favorable were catching up on some trends in magazines

The plural subject 'activities' requires the plural verb 'were' instead of 'is was' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× libraries offer a wide ranges of novels and fictions that I like

✓ libraries offer a wide range of novels and fiction that I like

The phrase 'a wide ranges' is incorrect because 'range' should be singular when preceded by 'a wide'. Also, 'fictions' is uncountable and should be 'fiction'.

× they want a child to be an avid reader

✓ they want their child to be an avid reader

The phrase 'a child' is too general here; 'their child' correctly refers to the children of the parents mentioned, making the sentence more precise and grammatically correct.

× they try to promote going to the libraries among their children

✓ they try to promote going to the library among their children

When referring to the activity of going to libraries in general, 'library' should be singular without 'the' or plural with no article. Here, 'the library' is more natural to indicate the concept of library-going as an activity.