Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question, using correct grammar, and avoiding redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it has a wide variety of books. I enjoy sitting quietly there and reading, which helps me learn new things.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details. Also, avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and ensure correct verb forms.

例: In the library, I usually read books because I love immersing myself in stories. The quiet and peaceful environment helps me concentrate without distractions.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and complete response with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating words and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: When I was a child, I didn't often go to the library because I found reading boring and couldn't appreciate it. However, now I enjoy reading much more.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: It depends on the individual preferences of Chinese children. Some enjoy going to the library because their parents encourage reading, while others prefer playing outside as their parents believe it's important for them to be active.

× Yes, I really love to go to library because library has lot of books and I read not reading.

✓ Yes, I really love to go to the library because the library has a lot of books and I read, not just reading.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'a lot of' needs the article 'a' before 'lot'. The phrase 'I read not reading' is unclear and corrected to 'I read, not just reading' for clarity.

× So I just like to go to library from the book I really loved and sitting just read it quietly.

✓ So I just like to go to the library to find books I really love and sit quietly to read them.

Again, 'the' is needed before 'library'. The sentence structure is awkward; 'from the book I really loved' is unclear and corrected to 'to find books I really love'. 'Sitting just read it quietly' is corrected to 'sit quietly to read them' for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× I can learn a lot of things from it.

✓ I can learn a lot of things from it.

This sentence is correct; no changes needed.

× I like to read books, you know, just read some books.

✓ I like to read books, you know, just read some books.

This sentence is correct; no changes needed.

× I really love it and immerse myself.

✓ I really love it and immerse myself in them.

The verb 'immerse' requires a preposition 'in' and an object. 'Myself' alone is insufficient; it should be 'immerse myself in them' referring to the books.

× I like to be immerse the books at other things don't bother me.

✓ I like to be immersed in the books so other things don't bother me.

The verb form should be 'immersed' (past participle) after 'to be'. The preposition 'in' is needed after 'immersed'. Also, 'at' is incorrect here; 'so' is used to show cause and effect.

× When when I'm kidding, I'm not so into reading books so I really go to library but but because I'm too young and too young to understand the fun of reading books, I just think it's too dull and boring.

✓ When I was a kid, I wasn't so into reading books so I didn't really go to the library because I was too young to understand the fun of reading books; I just thought it was too dull and boring.

'When I'm kidding' is incorrect; it should be 'When I was a kid'. The tense should be past ('was', 'didn't go'). 'Go to library' needs 'the' before 'library'. Repetition of 'but' is removed. 'Too young and too young' is redundant; corrected to 'too young'. 'Think' changed to past 'thought' to match past tense.

× Actually, it really depended on the individual preference.

✓ Actually, it really depends on individual preference.

The verb tense should be present ('depends') to match the general statement. 'The individual preference' is incorrect; 'individual preference' without 'the' is more natural here.

× Now someone they really love to go to library because their parents would love to teach them the importance of reading.

✓ Now some people really love to go to the library because their parents want to teach them the importance of reading.

'Someone they' is incorrect; 'some people' is appropriate. 'Go to library' needs 'the'. 'Would love to teach' is changed to 'want to teach' for clarity and correctness.

× And some children, they would like to go out to play because their parents think it's time for the child.

✓ And some children would like to go out to play because their parents think it's time for the child.

The pronoun 'they' after 'some children' is redundant and removed for smoother sentence structure.