Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your plan with reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I don't often go to the library. However, I plan to visit more frequently because it offers a quiet atmosphere where I can concentrate better, and I can work there with my girlfriend.

提案: Your answer shows your interest but needs clearer structure and grammar. Use proper verb forms and linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about what you do in the library. For example, mention reading or studying specific topics and explain why you like them.

例: In the library, I usually read books about business and psychology because these subjects interest me the most. Since I was a child, I have enjoyed learning about business, so visiting the library helps me deepen my knowledge.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more confidently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, clarify the meaning of 'media take on' or use simpler terms.

例: Yes, when I was 15, my school had a small library sponsored by the Georgian bank called 'Media Take On'. My friends and I often met there, and it was very helpful for my personal development.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'library railway'. Try to answer directly and clearly. If you don't know about Chinese kids, say so briefly, then focus on Georgian kids with clear sentences and linking words.

例: I don't know much about Chinese children, but in Georgia, kids don't visit the library very often. However, schools organize activities in the library, which helps improve their knowledge.

× I'm going to the library really.

✓ I really go to the library.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm going' (present continuous) with 'really' to express frequency, which is better conveyed with the simple present tense 'I really go'. Modal verb usage here relates to expressing habitual actions.

× because I have opportunity to work with my girlfriend, the library in quiet atmosphere and I will have opportunity to be quiet and more concentrated.

✓ because I have the opportunity to work with my girlfriend; the library has a quiet atmosphere, and I will have the opportunity to be quiet and more concentrated.

The sentence misses articles before 'opportunity' and uses incorrect prepositions. 'Opportunity to work' needs 'the' before 'opportunity'. Also, 'the library in quiet atmosphere' should be 'the library has a quiet atmosphere' to be grammatically correct.

× Sometimes I wanna explore new books about business, about psychology, because this is my favorite field in the world.

✓ Sometimes I want to explore new books about business and psychology because these are my favorite fields in the world.

The pronoun 'this' is singular but refers to two fields, so it should be plural 'these'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.

× When I was children, I started to learn more about business and this is my best part in the library.

✓ When I was a child, I started to learn more about business, and this was my favorite part of the library.

'Children' is plural, but the subject is singular 'I', so it should be 'a child'. Also, 'best part' is better expressed as 'favorite part' in this context.

× when I was 15 years old in my school, uh, Georgian bank, uh, made little library, uh, that called media take on.

✓ When I was 15 years old at my school, the Georgian bank made a small library called Media Take On.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to school. Also, 'little library' should be 'a small library' and 'that called' should be 'called'.

× And in this library, uh, me and my friends had many, many meetings, uh, and umm, it was really grateful for me because I improved myself.

✓ And in this library, my friends and I had many meetings, and it was really valuable for me because I improved myself.

The subject pronoun should be 'my friends and I' instead of 'me and my friends'. Also, 'grateful for me' is incorrect; 'valuable for me' or 'beneficial for me' is appropriate.

× They are going to the library railway, not often, but in the school they have some activities in the library and that's good for their knowledge and improvement.

✓ They go to the library rarely, not often, but at school they have some activities in the library, and that's good for their knowledge and improvement.

'Library railway' is incorrect; likely meant 'rarely'. Also, 'in the school' should be 'at school' for general reference.