Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and concise answer without hesitation sounds like 'uh'. Use simple and natural sentences to explain your reason. For example, start with a direct answer and then add a reason using linking words like 'because'.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because nowadays, most books are available online, so I usually read them on the Internet.

提案: Make sure your answer is complete and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, be specific about your activities in the library.

例: When I go to the university library, I usually use my laptop to read lecture slides and study materials related to my courses.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Structure your answer clearly by stating your main point first, then adding details. Use correct prepositions and verb forms.

例: No, I didn't go to a library in my village because there wasn't one. However, when I was a schoolgirl, I sometimes visited my school library to borrow books.

提案: Avoid vague or unclear statements. Give a clear opinion supported by logical reasons. Use simple and relevant vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

例: I am not sure, but I think many Chinese kids go to the library because it helps them learn and improve their knowledge.

× Uh, no. Uh, and the reason is that, uh, in today is the technological, uh, environment, every, uh, book, the most, uh, uh, version, uh, is able to read. With the Internet.

✓ Uh, no. Uh, and the reason is that, uh, today is a technological environment, and every book's most recent version is available to read on the Internet.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles, which makes it confusing. 'In today is the technological environment' should be 'today is a technological environment' to correctly express the idea. Also, 'every book, the most version, is able to read' is unclear; it should be 'every book's most recent version is available to read' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× For instance, when I entered my university library, I also have my own laptop and. No usually read information, slides or materials regarding my lecture.

✓ For instance, when I enter my university library, I also have my own laptop and usually read information, slides, or materials regarding my lectures.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the question is about usual activities, present tense 'enter' and 'have' should be used. Also, 'No usually read' is incorrect; it should be 'usually read'. The preposition 'regarding' is correctly used here.

× Uh, no, because in my village, umm, I was not library and uh, you know, when uh, uh, I was uh, schoolgirl, umm, sometimes I visited to my school library, uh, to receive several books.

✓ Uh, no, because in my village, there was no library, and, you know, when I was a schoolgirl, sometimes I visited my school library to borrow several books.

The phrase 'I was not library' is incorrect; it should be 'there was no library' to indicate the absence of a library. Also, 'visited to my school library' is incorrect; the verb 'visit' does not require 'to' before the object. 'Receive' is better replaced with 'borrow' in this context.

× MMM I don't have exact information but I think that yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because other countries different types of advantages and other Chinese kids have a general brain.

✓ MMM I don't have exact information, but I think that yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because, unlike other countries, they have different types of advantages, and Chinese kids have a general intelligence.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'Other countries different types of advantages' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'unlike other countries, they have different types of advantages'. Also, 'other Chinese kids have a general brain' is incorrect; 'general intelligence' is a better phrase. Pronouns should clearly refer to their antecedents to avoid confusion.