Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し冗長で、文法的な誤りや繰り返しが見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。例えば、主語と動詞の一致や時制に注意し、同じ内容の繰り返しを避けましょう。

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is very quiet, which helps me concentrate on my studies. Whenever I have free time at university, I prefer to study there.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、具体的な活動内容を明確に述べることが必要です。また、接続詞を使って文を論理的に繋げる練習をしましょう。

例: When I am in the library, I usually study for important exams, especially focusing on reading and writing. The quiet environment helps me concentrate better.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや繰り返しがあり、内容が少し曖昧です。過去形の使い方に注意し、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

例: I didn't go to the library when I was a child because I was very active and preferred outdoor activities. I often played outside with my friends.

提案: 回答が曖昧で、文法や語彙の誤りが目立ちます。質問に対して明確に答え、比較をする際は正確な表現を使いましょう。また、繰り返しを避け、論理的に話を展開することが重要です。

例: I'm not entirely sure, but I think Chinese children often go to the library to study more than Japanese children because education is highly valued in China, and many students are very diligent.

× Yes, I often go to the library to study because library is very quiet and I can concentrating on I can concentrate on studying.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to study because the library is very quiet and I can concentrate on studying.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' when referring to a specific place. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I often go to the library to study because library is very quiet and I can concentrating on I can concentrate on studying.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to study because the library is very quiet and I can concentrate on studying.

After modal verbs like 'can', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'can concentrating' is incorrect; it should be 'can concentrate'.

× So when I I have a free time in the university, I often go to the university.

✓ So when I have free time at the university, I often go to the university.

The phrase 'a free time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable here and does not need an article. Also, the preposition 'at' is more appropriate than 'in' when referring to being at a university.

× So when I I have a free time in the university, I often go to the university.

✓ So when I have free time at the university, I often go to the university.

The preposition 'at' is used to indicate location in general, such as 'at the university', whereas 'in' is used for enclosed spaces. 'At' fits better here.

× When I'm in library, I usually study, especially preparing for the iron test, the reading and writing.

✓ When I'm in the library, I usually study, especially preparing for the IELTS test, the reading and writing sections.

The definite article 'the' is necessary before 'library' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'iron test' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'IELTS test'.

× Because of the nature of library, such as the IT is very quiet, so I cannot I cannot practice the kicking.

✓ Because of the nature of the library, such as it is very quiet, so I cannot practice speaking.

'The' is needed before 'library' to specify the place. Also, 'IT' is likely a mishearing of 'it', and 'kicking' is incorrect; the intended word is probably 'speaking'.

× I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because when I was a child I was more active and preferred stay, preferred the activity of outdoors.

✓ I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because when I was a child I was more active and preferred to stay outdoors.

After 'preferred', the verb should be in the infinitive form 'to stay'. Also, 'the activity of outdoors' is awkward; 'stay outdoors' is more natural.

× So I always go. I always went outside with my friend to hang out at.

✓ So I always went outside with my friends to hang out.

The sentence should be in past tense consistently: 'always went'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' if more than one. The phrase 'to hang out at' is incomplete and unnecessary here.

× I'm not sure, I'm not sure that the expression of the Chinese, but I think Chinese tend to go to the library to study compared to the Japan because Chinese is famous for its educational attainment society.

✓ I'm not sure about the habits of Chinese people, but I think Chinese tend to go to the library to study compared to Japanese people because China is famous for its educational achievements.

'The expression of the Chinese' is unclear and incorrect; 'habits of Chinese people' is better. 'Compared to the Japan' should be 'compared to Japanese people'. Also, 'Chinese is famous for its educational attainment society' is awkward; 'China is famous for its educational achievements' is clearer.

× So everyone, uh, everyone is diligent.

✓ So everyone is diligent.

The repetition of 'everyone' is unnecessary and redundant.