Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, say 'I used to read books in the library when I was a student' instead of 'I used to reading books on library.'

例: I used to read books in the library when I was a student. I often made notes on various topics using books from different authors. However, now I don't have much time to visit the library because of my busy work schedule. In the future, I hope to go back to the library regularly.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has many filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about the types of scientific topics you read.

例: When I visit the library, I usually read various materials such as storybooks, novels, newspapers, and magazines. This helps me enrich my knowledge, especially about scientific topics like biology and chemistry, which relate to my science background.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid repeating words. Also, explain more clearly how reading comic books affected you.

例: When I was a kid, I used to read comic books. I often went to the library to find different types of fantasy comics. Reading them made me laugh and helped me enjoy my free time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Avoid repeating words and try to give a more confident and structured response. Use linking words to compare Chinese kids with Bangladeshi kids clearly.

例: I'm not completely sure, but I believe that Chinese children often visit libraries because Chinese people generally love reading various books. Similarly, Bangladeshi children also enjoy reading, especially comic books.

× I used to reading books on library.

✓ I used to read books in the library.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, the correct preposition is 'in' for 'library'. So, 'used to reading' is incorrect; it should be 'used to read'.

× I used to reading books on library.

✓ I used to read books in the library.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to 'library'. The correct preposition is 'in' because you go inside the library to read books.

× Back then I I made notes for various top various topics using different writers books.

✓ Back then, I made notes on various topics using books by different writers.

The sentence has repetition ('I I') and awkward phrasing ('top various topics'). Also, 'made notes for' should be 'made notes on'. The phrase 'different writers books' should be 'books by different writers' for clarity.

× But now I don't get time to go to books because of Ms. Business and in the future I hope that I will go to library for.

✓ But now I don't have time to go to the library because of my business, and in the future, I hope that I will go to the library more often.

'Go to books' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library'. 'Ms. Business' is unclear; likely meant 'my business'. Also, 'go to library for' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'go to the library more often' or similar. Added missing articles and corrected sentence structure.

× I usually read different types of books, uh, when I visit the library, for example, like I read story books, novels, newspapers and different types of magazines as well.

✓ I usually read different types of books when I visit the library; for example, I read storybooks, novels, newspapers, and various magazines as well.

The phrase 'for example, like' is redundant; use either 'for example' or 'like'. Also, 'story books' is better as 'storybooks'. The sentence is improved by removing unnecessary fillers and clarifying the list.

× Uh, it's really helpful to enrich my knowledge about uh, umm, different, uh, uh, scientific topic, uh, because I have a science background.

✓ It's really helpful to enrich my knowledge about different scientific topics because I have a science background.

The sentence has unnecessary fillers ('uh', 'umm') and 'scientific topic' should be plural 'scientific topics' to match 'different'. Removing fillers improves clarity.

× I like, I used to, uh, read comic books.

✓ I used to read comic books.

The phrase 'I like' is unnecessary and confusing here. 'Used to' already indicates past habit, so 'I like' should be removed for clarity.

× I went libraries to search different types of fantasy comic books, umm, and it uh, it really helped me to, uh, make me laugh and uh, enjoy my and enjoy my times.

✓ I went to libraries to search for different types of fantasy comic books, and it really helped me to laugh and enjoy my time.

'Went libraries' is incorrect; it should be 'went to libraries'. 'Enjoy my and enjoy my times' is repetitive and incorrect; 'enjoy my time' is correct. Added missing preposition 'for' after 'search'.

× I went libraries to search different types of fantasy comic books, umm, and it uh, it really helped me to, uh, make me laugh and uh, enjoy my and enjoy my times.

✓ I went to libraries to search for different types of fantasy comic books, and it really helped me to laugh and enjoy my time.

The verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when followed by the object. Also, 'went libraries' needs the preposition 'to'.

× Actually I'm not sure about it, but as far I know that Chinese people loves to read different types of books.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure about it, but as far as I know, Chinese people love to read different types of books.

Missing preposition 'as' in 'as far as I know'. Also, 'Chinese people loves' is incorrect; 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'love'.

× Actually I'm not sure about it, but as far I know that Chinese people loves to read different types of books.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure about it, but as far as I know, Chinese people love to read different types of books.

The verb 'loves' is incorrect with the plural subject 'Chinese people'. The correct verb form is 'love'.

× So I I I believe that the Chinese kids like to go to library for searching different types of books.

✓ So I believe that Chinese kids like to go to the library to search for different types of books.

'Go to library' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'for searching' is incorrect; it should be 'to search for'. Removed repeated 'I'.

× So I I I believe that the Chinese kids like to go to library for searching different types of books.

✓ So I believe that Chinese kids like to go to the library to search for different types of books.

The preposition 'for' before 'searching' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to search for'. Also, 'go to library' requires the article 'the'.

× For example, like Bangladeshi people, they may be like to read comic books.

✓ For example, like Bangladeshi people, they may like to read comic books.

The phrase 'may be like to read' is incorrect. It should be 'may like to read'. The verb 'like' does not need 'be' here.