Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda zaman ifadelerini daha net kullanmalı ve cümlenizi daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar eklemelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizdeki dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltmek ve daha doğal ifadeler kullanmak önemlidir.

例: During my student years, I preferred going to the library to study; however, recently I choose to stay at home for work or study because it is more convenient.

提案: Cevabınızda gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri (uh) çok fazla kullanılmış. Daha net ve doğrudan cevap vermeye çalışın. Ayrıca, cümlenizi bağlaçlarla daha akıcı hale getirin ve detaylandırın.

例: When I went to the library to study, I tried to concentrate fully and review my work quickly to make the most of my time.

提案: Cümlenizde tekrar eden kelimeleri ve dolgu ifadelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar kullanmalı ve fikirlerinizi daha açık ifade etmelisiniz.

例: Yes, sometimes my father took us to the library to pick up different books, and I really enjoyed those moments because they encouraged me to read a variety of books, which is a great activity for children.

提案: Cümleniz dilbilgisi açısından hatalı ve anlamı net değil. Daha açık ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız.

例: I am not sure about Chinese children, but speaking about my country, children do not visit libraries very often because I believe the government does not strongly encourage it.

× In my student year, I prefer to go to library for studying, but in meantime I don't go to the library because I choose to stay at my home for working or studying.

✓ In my student years, I preferred to go to the library for studying, but in the meantime I don't go to the library because I choose to stay at home for working or studying.

The phrase 'go to library' is incorrect because 'library' is a countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'in my student year' should be pluralized to 'student years' to indicate the period of study. 'In meantime' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'in the meantime'. 'At my home' is better expressed as 'at home' in English.

× In my student year, I prefer to go to library for studying, but in meantime I don't go to the library because I choose to stay at my home for working or studying.

✓ In my student years, I preferred to go to the library for studying, but in the meantime I don't go to the library because I choose to stay at home for working or studying.

The sentence refers to a past time ('my student years'), so the verb 'prefer' should be in the past tense 'preferred' to maintain tense consistency.

× As I said before, uh, I used to go to the library, uh, but uh, when uh, I went to the library for studying, uh, I tried to be more focused, uh, and uh, check my work as quick as I can.

✓ As I said before, I used to go to the library, but when I went to the library for studying, I tried to be more focused and check my work as quickly as I could.

The phrase 'check my work as quick as I can' is incorrect because 'quick' is an adjective; the adverb 'quickly' should be used to modify the verb 'check'. Also, 'as can' should be 'as I could' to match past tense. The excessive use of 'uh' is omitted for clarity.

× As I said before, uh, I used to go to the library, uh, but uh, when uh, I went to the library for studying, uh, I tried to be more focused, uh, and uh, check my work as quick as I can.

✓ As I said before, I used to go to the library, but when I went to the library for studying, I tried to be more focused and check my work as quickly as I could.

The modal verb 'can' should be changed to 'could' to match the past tense context of the sentence.

× Yeah, sometimes my father took, uh, took us to the library for, uh, picking up, uh, different books, Uh, and I really enjoyed that time and it gives me, uh, encourage to read lots of different books and it's a great thing to do in childhood, I think.

✓ Yeah, sometimes my father took us to the library to pick up different books, and I really enjoyed that time and it gave me encouragement to read lots of different books. It's a great thing to do in childhood, I think.

The phrase 'for picking up' is incorrect; the infinitive 'to pick up' should be used after 'took us to the library'. 'It gives me encourage' is incorrect; it should be 'it gave me encouragement' to match past tense and correct noun form. Also, the sentence is split for clarity.

× I don't have enough knowledge about the Chinese kids, but if I, if I want to speak about my country, uh, are children, uh, doesn't go to the library very often, uh, because uh, it is not encouraged by the government, I think and uh, libraries.

✓ I don't have enough knowledge about Chinese kids, but if I want to speak about my country, our children don't go to the library very often because it is not encouraged by the government, I think, and libraries.

The pronoun 'are' is incorrect and should be 'our' to indicate possession. Also, 'doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with the plural subject 'children'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.