Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences simpler and more direct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I often go to the library to work on my projects because I can find useful information there."

例: Yes, I often go to the library to work on my projects. It helps me find detailed information and reliable data, which I use to complete my assignments effectively.

提案: Your answer has good content but some sentences are confusing and have grammatical mistakes. Try to use clearer sentences and linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain your ideas. For example, "I collect data for my projects and enjoy the quiet environment because it helps me concentrate and be creative."

例: In the library, I usually collect data and information relevant to my projects. I also enjoy the quiet atmosphere because it helps me focus and boosts my creativity.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using simpler and more direct sentences. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. For example, "No, I did not go to the library as a child because I preferred playing sports."

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I was more interested in playing sports than reading books.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Avoid vague phrases and be more specific. For example, "I am not sure, but I think Chinese children often go to the library to improve their creativity and knowledge."

例: I am not sure, but I believe that many Chinese children visit libraries from an early age to enhance their creativity and learn new things, instead of spending all their time playing outside.

× Yes, I often go to library especially for my project to work and or reshirts whenever I have to go there in a depth for my work.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library especially for my project work and research whenever I have to go there in depth for my work.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'reshirts' seems to be a typo for 'research'. 'In depth' does not need 'a' before it.

× At that time I used to go in a library and research about it and collect the information and data and put in a relevant answer.

✓ At that time I used to go to the library, research it, collect information and data, and put it into a relevant answer.

The correct preposition with 'go' when referring to a place is 'to', not 'in'. Also, 'research about' is incorrect; 'research' is a transitive verb and does not need 'about'. 'Put in a relevant answer' is unclear; 'put it into a relevant answer' is clearer.

× As I told you, I just collect all data and information which is appropriate for my project work questions and while sitting there I find peace because there is a restriction to talk to in a liability which helps me to develop my creativity level.

✓ As I told you, I just collect all data and information which is appropriate for my project work questions, and while sitting there I find peace because there is a restriction on talking in the library which helps me to develop my creativity level.

'Restriction to talk to in a liability' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'restriction on talking in the library'. Also, 'liability' is a wrong word here; it should be 'library'.

× Actually no, because when I was a kid I was like not too much fascinated toward the reading books and do some research and something else.

✓ Actually no, because when I was a kid I was not very fascinated by reading books or doing research and other things.

'Fascinated toward' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'fascinated by'. Also, 'reading books' does not need 'the'. 'Do some research and something else' is vague; 'doing research and other things' is clearer.

× At that time I was better in playing, not in a library place.

✓ At that time I preferred playing, not being in the library.

'Better in playing' is awkward; 'preferred playing' is better. 'Not in a library place' is incorrect; 'not being in the library' is correct.

× So I was more in, uh, playing a sport rather than the library.

✓ So I was more into playing sports rather than going to the library.

'Playing a sport' is less natural than 'playing sports' in general. Also, 'rather than the library' needs a verb to compare activities; 'rather than going to the library' is correct.

× Actually, I really don't know about that, but as far I knew the Chinese is developing their creative creativity level in the next part, so maybe their children used to go in a library an early age and gain the knowledge rather than playing in a mud and playground.

✓ Actually, I really don't know about that, but as far as I know, the Chinese are developing their creativity, so maybe their children go to the library at an early age to gain knowledge rather than playing in the mud and playground.

'As far I knew' should be 'as far as I know' for present knowledge. 'The Chinese is' should be 'the Chinese are' because 'Chinese' is plural here. 'Used to go in a library an early age' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library at an early age'. 'Playing in a mud' is incorrect; 'playing in the mud' is correct.