Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some incomplete and unclear phrases such as "If but" and an unfinished sentence at the end. To improve, try to avoid such fragments and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Also, use linking words effectively to connect ideas smoothly. Keep your answer concise and natural, avoiding redundancy.

例: I used to visit the library often when I was a child, but now I rarely go because I prefer reading digital books and newspapers. However, if I need a physical copy of a book, I will definitely visit the library.

提案: Your answer is relevant but includes filler words like "Uh" and ends abruptly with "so." To improve, avoid fillers and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words such as "also" or "in addition" to connect ideas clearly. Provide specific details to enrich your response while keeping it concise and natural.

例: I usually visit the library to borrow books and read newspapers. In addition, during my undergraduate studies, I often used the discussion rooms to collaborate with my peers on group projects.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some redundancy and unclear phrases like "MU so much money." To improve, clarify your points and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words such as "because" and "so" appropriately to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I often went to a nearby library as a child because my parents preferred not to spend too much money on storybooks. Therefore, I borrowed many books from the library to read at home.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "for their studies and researcher" and "Even they have discussions." To improve, use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Use linking words like "and" or "also" to connect ideas smoothly. Be concise and natural in your response.

例: Although I'm not very familiar with Chinese children, I have seen them using the library frequently for studying and research. They also often have discussions with their friends there, so I believe they visit the library quite often.

× If but. However, if I need a physical copy of a book, I will definitely go to the.

✓ However, if I need a physical copy of a book, I will definitely go to the library.

The phrase 'If but.' is incomplete and does not form a proper sentence, causing confusion. The sentence ends abruptly without specifying the place to go. The correction removes the incomplete phrase and completes the sentence by adding 'library' to clarify the meaning.

× Yes, there was a library close by so I frequently visited there and borrowed several books to read at home.

✓ Yes, there was a library close by so I frequently visited it and borrowed several books to read at home.

The verb 'visited' is typically followed directly by the object without a preposition like 'there'. Using 'visited there' is incorrect. The correct form is 'visited it' to refer to the library.

× Mainly because my parents didn't want to spend MU so much money on story books when I was a kid, so I used to go to the library and borrow some.

✓ Mainly because my parents didn't want to spend so much money on story books when I was a kid, so I used to go to the library and borrow some.

The phrase 'MU so much money' is incorrect; 'MU' seems to be a typo or extraneous word. Removing 'MU' corrects the quantifier usage, making the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I'm not much familiar with Chinese kids, but I have seen them using the library quite often for their studies and researcher.

✓ I'm not very familiar with Chinese kids, but I have seen them using the library quite often for their studies and research.

The phrase 'not much familiar' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'not very familiar'. Also, 'researcher' is a noun meaning a person, but the intended word is 'research', which is an uncountable noun referring to the activity. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.