Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ студента естественный и по существу, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразие лексики. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и избегать повторов, например, вместо повторения "I go to the library" использовать синонимы или перефразировать.

例: Yes, I often visit the library on my university campus because it provides a quiet environment. Moreover, I use this time to complete my assignments and prepare for the IELTS exam, which helps me focus better.

提案: Ответ содержит полезную информацию, но структура и связность могут быть улучшены. Следует избегать разговорных слов и фраз, таких как "to chill", и использовать более формальный стиль. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Usually, I visit the university library to complete my assignments and prepare for the IELTS exam. Additionally, I sometimes watch educational videos or write in my journal to relax and reflect.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и разговорных слов, что снижает естественность речи. Рекомендуется избегать заполнителей (uh, umm) и улучшить грамматику и структуру предложения. Также стоит уточнить детали и использовать связующие слова.

例: Yes, I often visited the library as a child because I was very interested in comics and comedy books. I would spend two to three hours there reading without taking breaks, which was very enjoyable for me.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и некоторые грамматические ошибки. Рекомендуется улучшить связность, избегать повторов и использовать более точные выражения. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, I believe many Chinese children often visit the library. For example, my friends and I used to spend entire Saturdays there, reading comics and sharing our thoughts because it was a favorite weekend hobby.

× I usually go there to finish my university tasks and practice for the IELTS exam.

✓ I usually go there to finish my university tasks and practice for the IELTS exam.

No correction needed here as the preposition 'for' is correctly used with 'practice'. This sentence is grammatically correct.

× So I usually go to my university's library to accomplish my assignments and prepare for IELTS exam.

✓ So I usually go to my university's library to accomplish my assignments and prepare for the IELTS exam.

The phrase 'prepare for IELTS exam' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'IELTS exam'. The correct prepositional phrase is 'prepare for the IELTS exam' because it refers to a specific exam.

× And also sometimes I will just go to there to watch some videos, to chill and to do some journaling.

✓ And also sometimes I will just go there to watch some videos, to chill and to do some journaling.

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect because 'there' already indicates a place and does not require the preposition 'to'. The correct form is 'go there'.

× So I would go to there to rate them about two or three hours straight without rest and.

✓ So I would go there to read them for about two or three hours straight without rest.

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect; it should be 'go there'. Also, 'rate them' is likely a mistake for 'read them'. Additionally, 'at in that age' should be corrected to 'at that age' (not shown here as it is part of a different sentence). The preposition 'for' is used to indicate duration ('for about two or three hours').

× We would just spend a whole day together and read comics and then shared what we read because we we really enjoyed it and it was our hobby to do in Saturdays, in weekends.

✓ We would just spend a whole day together and read comics and then share what we read because we really enjoyed it and it was our hobby to do on Saturdays, on weekends.

The prepositions 'in Saturdays' and 'in weekends' are incorrect. The correct preposition for days and weekends is 'on'. Also, 'shared' should be 'share' to maintain parallel structure with 'read'.