Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Faut que tu sois plus clair pis précis dans ta réponse. Essaie de faire des phrases plus courtes pis utilise des mots simples mais efficaces. Aussi, évite de répéter la même idée plusieurs fois. Par exemple, explique clairement ta situation actuelle et ton habitude de lecture sans redondance.

例: I used to go to the library every day when I was a student. Now, I have a full-time job and I am very busy, so I rarely visit the library. However, I love reading, so I keep a small collection of books at my office and read them during breaks.

提案: Ta réponse manque de clarté pis de structure. Faut que tu expliques mieux ce que tu fais dans la bibliothèque avec des phrases simples et bien liées. Aussi, évite les phrases confuses comme "Novels are a big box in which there is a one story."

例: In the library, I usually read books, especially novels. I enjoy stories that take me to different worlds. For example, in high school, I read a romance novel that I enjoyed for a whole month.

提案: Essaie de faire des phrases complètes et claires. Explique ton intérêt pour la lecture de façon logique et utilise des mots simples. Par exemple, parle de ton habitude de lire des livres d'histoires quand tu étais jeune et comment ça a changé avec le temps.

例: Yes, I used to go to my school library when I was a kid. I was very interested in reading storybooks. As I grew older, I started reading novels, including romance and educational books.

提案: Faut que tu sois plus organisé dans ta réponse. Utilise des mots simples pis évite les hésitations comme "uh". Explique clairement comment les écoles encouragent les enfants à lire et pourquoi c'est important.

例: In China, every school has a library. Teachers encourage students to visit the library and read books. They believe reading helps students gain knowledge and become successful in life.

× Novels are a big box in which there is a one story.

✓ Novels are a big box in which there is one story.

The article 'a' before 'one story' is unnecessary because 'one' already specifies the singular quantity. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Novels are a big box in which there is a one story.

✓ A novel is a big box in which there is one story.

The subject 'Novels' is plural but the description refers to a single story, so the subject should be singular 'A novel' to match the singular 'one story'.

× that was that novel took me to reader one month.

✓ That novel took me one month to read.

The phrase 'took me to reader' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'took me one month to read' using the infinitive form 'to read' after 'took me'.

× I am always busy at my work.

✓ I am always busy with my work.

The correct preposition to use with 'busy' is 'with' not 'at'. 'Busy with my work' is the standard expression.

× I go to library and read books.

✓ I go to the library and read books.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place.

× I have keen interest in reading.

✓ I have a keen interest in reading.

The phrase 'keen interest' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I don't know why but I am.

✓ I don't know why, but I am interested.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'interested' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× Well, and the in every school of the China, every school has a library.

✓ Well, in every school in China, every school has a library.

The phrase 'the in every school of the China' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'in every school in China'.

× So teacher always encourage them, their children to go to the library and get some, uh, books to read.

✓ So teachers always encourage their children to go to the library and get some books to read.

The subject should be plural 'teachers' to agree with the plural object 'children'. Also, 'them' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× They want their students to read books and they, so they can become a knowledgeable and, uh, very, uh, successful in their, their life.

✓ They want their students to read books so they can become knowledgeable and very successful in their lives.

The phrase 'a knowledgeable' is incorrect because 'knowledgeable' is an adjective and does not take an article. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives' to match 'their'.