Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Die Antwort ist gut strukturiert und enthält relevante Details, aber einige Formulierungen sind unnatürlich und es gibt kleinere Grammatikfehler. Versuchen Sie, flüssigere und natürlichere Sätze zu bilden und Wiederholungen zu vermeiden.

例: I often went to the library during my bachelor's studies because it provided a quiet and focused environment. Whenever I had free time, I used the library to complete my homework or prepare for exams. The motivating atmosphere, with everyone studying, helped me concentrate and be more productive.

提案: Die Antwort enthält gute Inhalte, aber es gibt grammatikalische Fehler und die Satzstruktur könnte verbessert werden. Verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um die Antwort flüssiger und logischer zu gestalten.

例: I usually go to the library because it provides a quiet environment. For example, when I need to write an essay, I search for academic books and articles to gather reliable information. Moreover, I often prepare for exams there since it helps me concentrate better and study more efficiently.

提案: Die Antwort ist unvollständig und enthält mehrere Grammatik- und Ausdrucksfehler. Versuchen Sie, vollständige Sätze zu bilden und Ihre Gedanken klar und präzise auszudrücken.

例: When I was a child, my mother took my brother and me to the library every weekend because she believed reading was important for our growth. Books contain valuable information and teach important lessons that children need to learn. I really enjoyed those visits because they helped me develop a love for reading.

提案: Die Antwort ist unklar und endet abrupt. Es fehlen klare Aussagen und eine logische Struktur. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Meinung klar zu formulieren und vollständige Sätze zu verwenden.

例: I don't think this question can be answered with a simple yes or no because it depends on parents' attitudes towards reading. Some parents believe reading is a waste of time and may negatively affect their children's learning. However, my parents thought reading would have a positive impact on me, so they encouraged it.

× When I was studying for my bachelor degrees, I often went to the library because it was quiet and UMM offers a focus environment.

✓ When I was studying for my bachelor's degree, I often went to the library because it was quiet and UMM offers a focused environment.

The phrase 'bachelor degrees' should be singular possessive 'bachelor's degree' because it refers to one type of degree. Also, 'focus environment' is incorrect; the adjective form 'focused environment' is appropriate here.

× UMM offers a focus environment.

✓ UMM offers a focused environment.

The noun 'environment' should be modified by the adjective 'focused' rather than the noun 'focus'. Using the present participle form 'focused' correctly describes the environment.

× Usually, I would go to the library because it's provide a quiet environment.

✓ Usually, I would go to the library because it provides a quiet environment.

The verb 'provide' must agree with the third person singular subject 'it', so it should be 'provides'.

× For instance, when if I have to write an essay, I would search for academic books and articles there which help me gather reliable information.

✓ For instance, if I have to write an essay, I would search for academic books and articles there which help me gather reliable information.

The conjunctions 'when' and 'if' are incorrectly combined. Only 'if' is needed to express the conditional meaning.

× Additionally, I often prepare for exams in the library since it allows me to concentrate better and study more efficiency.

✓ Additionally, I often prepare for exams in the library since it allows me to concentrate better and study more efficiently.

The adverb 'efficiently' should be used to modify the verb 'study' instead of the adjective 'efficiency'.

× When I was a child, my mother used to take my brother and me to the library on every weekend because she believed it was important for us to read a lot of book while growing up because book contains many valuable information and teach important rules as a child need to learn.

✓ When I was a child, my mother used to take my brother and me to the library every weekend because she believed it was important for us to read a lot of books while growing up because books contain much valuable information and teach important rules that a child needs to learn.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' when referring to multiple items. Also, 'information' is uncountable and should be preceded by 'much' instead of 'many'. The verb 'teach' needs to agree with the plural subject 'books'. The phrase 'as a child need to learn' should be corrected to 'that a child needs to learn' for clarity and agreement.

× I really enjoyed those visit because they.

✓ I really enjoyed those visits because they were enjoyable.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. 'Visit' should be plural 'visits' to match 'those'. The sentence needs completion to express the reason clearly.

× I don't think that is the question that you can answer is simply with yes or no because it really depends on how parents think about reading books.

✓ I don't think that is a question you can answer simply with yes or no because it really depends on how parents think about reading books.

The phrase 'the question that you can answer is simply with yes or no' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'a question you can answer simply with yes or no'. Also, 'simply' should be placed before 'with' for correct adverb placement.

× Some parents would think reading books is waste a waste of time and it would affect their kids learning negatively.

✓ Some parents would think reading books is a waste of time and it would affect their kids' learning negatively.

The phrase 'is waste a waste' is incorrect; it should be 'is a waste'. Also, 'kids learning' should be possessive 'kids' learning'.

× And my parents would think that reading books would affect me positively because.

✓ My parents would think that reading books would affect me positively because it helps me learn and grow.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It needs completion to express the reason clearly.