Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「I prefer delivery at my university」という表現は不明瞭で、「library」と「delivery」の使い方も誤っています。より自然で明確な表現を心がけ、文法の基本を見直しましょう。

例: Yes, I go to the library almost every day. I prefer the university library because it has a vast collection of over 1.5 million high-quality books, including some rare and valuable ones. I really enjoy reading these kinds of books.

提案: 回答は内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。例えば、「prepare preparation for directors and seminars」や「books what I am interested in」などの表現は不自然です。より具体的で正確な表現を使い、接続詞を活用して論理的に話しましょう。

例: Usually, I study for seminars and presentations in the library. However, most of the time, I enjoy reading books that interest me, such as those about gender studies, feminism, or economics.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、「pray for the playground」という表現は誤りで、「play at the playground」が正しいです。また、話が少し冗長なので、簡潔にまとめるとより効果的です。

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child. Instead, I preferred playing soccer or basketball with my friends at the playground because I wasn't interested in academic books back then.

提案: 回答は内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。「made started」「Chinese authority is very competitive society」「crime schools」などの表現は誤りで、意味が伝わりにくいです。正しい語彙と文法を使い、具体的な理由を明確に述べましょう。

例: I don't think many Chinese children often go to the library because most of them attend special prep schools to prepare for entrance exams. Since the education system is very competitive, their focus is mainly on exam preparation rather than leisure reading.

× Yeah, I always go to library almost every day.

✓ Yeah, I always go to the library almost every day.

In English, the definite article 'the' is required before 'library' when referring to a specific place that both speaker and listener know. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect.

× I like, I prefer delivery at my university which have 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some is a very precious, so I like this kind of books.

✓ I like, I prefer the delivery at my university which has 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some are very precious, so I like this kind of books.

The verb must agree with the subject in number. 'University' is singular, so 'have' should be 'has'. Also, 'some' refers to plural 'books', so 'is' should be 'are'.

× I like, I prefer delivery at my university which have 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some is a very precious, so I like this kind of books.

✓ I like, I prefer the delivery at my university which has 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some are very precious, so I like this kind of books.

The noun 'delivery' here likely needs the definite article 'the' to specify the particular delivery service at the university.

× I like, I prefer delivery at my university which have 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some is a very precious, so I like this kind of books.

✓ I like, I prefer the delivery at my university which has 150 million books and these books are very, uh, high quality and some are very precious, so I like this kind of books.

The phrase 'some is a very precious' is incorrect; 'some' refers to plural, so 'are very precious' is correct. Also, 'this kind of books' should be 'this kind of book' or 'these kinds of books' for correct quantifier usage.

× Sometimes I study for the prepare preparation for directors and seminars, but in on in the most cases I often read books what I am interested in and something related to a gender or feminisms or economics, so on.

✓ Sometimes I study to prepare for lectures and seminars, but in most cases I often read books that I am interested in and something related to gender, feminism, or economics, and so on.

The phrase 'study for the prepare preparation' is incorrect; 'study to prepare' is correct. Also, 'directors' likely should be 'lectures'. Prepositions like 'in on in the most cases' are incorrect; 'in most cases' is correct. 'Books what I am interested in' should be 'books that I am interested in'. 'A gender or feminisms' should be 'gender or feminism'.

× Sometimes I study for the prepare preparation for directors and seminars, but in on in the most cases I often read books what I am interested in and something related to a gender or feminisms or economics, so on.

✓ Sometimes I study to prepare for lectures and seminars, but in most cases I often read books that I am interested in and something related to gender, feminism, or economics, and so on.

The relative pronoun 'what' is incorrect here; 'that' should be used to refer to 'books'.

× No, I didn't, and when I was a kid I preferred to, uh, pray for the playground with my friends.

✓ No, I didn't, and when I was a kid I preferred to play at the playground with my friends.

The verb 'pray' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'play'. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'at' when referring to a location like 'playground'.

× No, I didn't, and when I was a kid I preferred to, uh, pray for the playground with my friends.

✓ No, I didn't, and when I was a kid I preferred to play at the playground with my friends.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate location.

× I often enjoyed playing soccer or basketball at playgrounds and umm, I was not interested in learning academic or general books.

✓ I often enjoyed playing soccer or basketball at playgrounds and, umm, I was not interested in studying academic or general books.

The verb 'learning' is not typically used with 'books'; 'studying' is more appropriate. Also, a comma after 'and' improves clarity.

× I often enjoyed playing soccer or basketball at playgrounds and umm, I was not interested in learning academic or general books.

✓ I often enjoyed playing soccer or basketball at playgrounds and, umm, I was not interested in studying academic or general books.

No pronoun error here; correction focuses on verb choice and punctuation.

× I don't think so because I heard that most of Chinese kids made started at the prep school, a special school for preparing for their entrance exams.

✓ I don't think so because I heard that most Chinese kids start at prep schools, special schools for preparing for their entrance exams.

The phrase 'made started at the prep school' is incorrect; 'start at prep schools' is correct. Also, 'the prep school' should be plural 'prep schools' to match 'most Chinese kids'.

× I don't think so because I heard that most of Chinese kids made started at the prep school, a special school for preparing for their entrance exams.

✓ I don't think so because I heard that most Chinese kids start at prep schools, special schools for preparing for their entrance exams.

The phrase 'made started' is incorrect past tense usage; 'start' is the correct present tense verb to describe habitual action.

× Chinese authority is very competitive society, so their preparation is started in preps or crime schools.

✓ Chinese society is very competitive, so their preparation starts in prep or cram schools.

'Chinese authority' is incorrect; 'Chinese society' is appropriate. 'Competitive society' needs an article or rephrasing. 'Preparation is started' is passive and awkward; 'preparation starts' is better. 'Crime schools' is a mishearing; the correct term is 'cram schools'.